To my friend Nathan a.k.a Nova

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Nathan

He writes his songs, of lust and cuddles.
He always talks but doesnt say alot.
Displays his happiness but not the sadness and troubles.
His status reigns true but has he lost the plot?

Nathan is a kettle, boiling to the brim.
He thinks and thinks but nothing lets loose.
What saves his soul?? Or course it's a little dye and trim.
He never gives a makeover to what's really him.

He goes by many names. Ellusive? I think so
He tries so hard, to portray his constant glee.
Please nathan stop keeping these emotions, running too and fro.
Sit down, let it out and have a cup of tea ;)


I haven't edited this. Haha oh well :P
LOVEYA NATHE ;)
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Aha, i do love you rhi.

So, so, very much...

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Alot of the time, im on here using my PS3 & my trusty usb keyboard.
Dont expect much fancy quoting blocks... I shall do what I can. ;)




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He always talks but doesn't say alot.


A lot is two words and also the most horrid adjective of all time. (My teacher taught me to hate 'a lot' in fourth grade, and it's stuck with me.) How about "He always talks but never says"?


What saves his soul?? Of course it's a little dye and trim.


No need for double question marks.

I haven't edited this. Haha oh well


PLEASE edit something before posting on here, no one likes reading careless spelling and punctuation errors.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading it and thought it was sweet. I hope you have a great day!

-Tori :pirate3:
Nants ingonyama bagithi Baba
Sithi uhm ingonyama
Nants ingonyama bagithi baba
Sithi uhhmm ingonyama
Ingonyama
Siyo Nqoba
Ingonyama
Ingonyama nengw' enamabala

If you know what this is from, become my best friend. =)




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Greetings, NeverendingPages! I'm Firearris (Or Heather, if you prefer!), and I'll be your reviewer tonight.

For the most part I like this poem, except for one little thing. The 'He' at the start of a bunch of the lines is bugging me. It's repetitive and therefore annoying. Otherwise, I like it. You did good.

Keep it up and good luck.

~Heather
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard appears "We have weasels now!"
[Firearris] 10:45 pm: askes the guard for the weasel!
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard gives Firearris the Weasel.
[Firearris] 10:46 pm: aquires the weasel and renames it "Cat"

Take that, Lumi.



To gain your own voice, you have to forget about having it heard.
— Allen Ginsberg