When nothing else matters!

When nothing else matters

Have you ever cried so much you ran out of tears
I have, an ocean of sorrows, pain and fears

Have you ever screamt so much you ran out of noise
I have, no words, no screams, I lost my voice

Have you ever felt so much you ran out of emotions
I have, no love no hate no more thoughtly motions

Have you ever run so much you ran out of speed
I have, not a step, not a move, it's true indeed

Have you ever trusted so much, you ran out of trust
I have, now a days by believes I’m discussed

Have you ever lost so much you ran out of losses
I have, all that mattered is lying under crosses

Have you ever dreamt so much you ran out of dreams
I have, my nights are empty, yes so it seems

Have you ever hated so much you ran out of hate
I have, I closed all the doors to hells gate

Have you ever loved so much you ran out of love
I have, I lost my way to heaven above

Have you ever lost everything?
If you have, you are like me
lost your love and life and way to be

When nothing else matters, come to me
don’t ever come to me, hold tight to what matters

But if there is nothing of matter
and your life seem to shatter
i will come hold you tight
be your mourning light
and togheter, maybe we can fight
make everything that's wrong, right
illuminate the pain of night
yes i will hold you tight
tight to my chest
and in peace we'll rest
when we've won the fight
illuminated the pain of night
when we can see the light

But i advide you, to hold on
to what matters, hold on
to what matters, dont let go.

This is great, at least, it has the potential to be.
You have excellent thought pattern and the rhyming is okay too, as you were able maintain it.
However, your punctuation is quite faulty and makes it quite hard to understand without reading the line again. Try reading the poem again to your self then check the punctuations such as pauses and stops. Some typographical errors too.
Overall, your message is passed across. Very interesting poem.
You make me want to write again, it has been a very long time. GOLD STAR

The first thing I noticed was the punctuation, or, more accurately, the lack/improper use of it. Secondly, you had a number of spelling and capitalization mistakes which did not make this poem easy to read. Poetry generally follows the same grammatical rules as prose. I suggest you go back through and proofread this more closely.

In addition to the aforementioned, your rhyming felt forced, your line lengths were uneven (which added to the forced feeling of the rhymes), and your imagery was cliche. Rhymes rely upon rhythms and patterns, and while you had a pattern for most of the poem, the line lengths were uneven, which made the rhythm inconsistent, which in turn made the rhyme fall apart. It didn't help that some of the rhymes were a bit far-fetched, like noise/voice. The pattern of rhyming also fell apart near the end of the poem starting from the stanza beginning with "Have you ever lost everything?"

As far as imagery went, there was nothing unique about it. Everything in this poem is a common turn of phrase or general image; in short, everything was either cliche or vague. Imagery in poetry should always be tangible and easy to visualize; by using just nonspecific words like "pain" and "hate" and "love", you leave your reader no indication of what exactly "pain" is, or to what extent it is felt. In addition to being clear and specific, imagery also has to be unique; reading about the same thing described in the same way over and over again is boring. As is, right now, I have no clear idea what this poem was about because you jumped around and dumped a huge amount of vague imagery rather than focus on the specific aspect you wished to describe. In the future, try describing things in a way that you've never heard it described before but that makes perfect sense to you, and write so that that it makes perfect sense to your readers, too.

Overall, I suggest you work on describing things in a way that is uniquely you. Your poetry needs to be unique to stand out among all the millions of poems out there, and right now, this poem is lacking any uniqueness. Using proper spelling and grammar wouldn't hurt either.

Well thanku Kyllorac for ALL the GOOD criticism... really nice and friendly,
couldnt u atleast say one good thing instead of talking aout how ad it is for like etirnity, i dont mind some advice but i dont enjoy reading 20 lines of how bad it is, then just dont comment.