Haiku

Soft and gentle snow
And bitterly gelid ice-
Winter's sensations.

Haiku : three unrhymed lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables, respectively.


Haiku posted previously (by myself) in this forum:

How the setting sun
Quietly delights my mind-
Secret of summer.


-Amice-

Nice, but there shuold be no capitals. I read that hiakus were supposed to have none. Other wise good younge grasshopper.

you spelled young like tongue just with a "y" instead of a "T" and other stuff, this is good i like the similarity of the two haiku's, you could do many more, i would like to read more if you have any, and if you didn't try to make some more, the only spelling mistake i found was gelid or is that a word, and if it is what does it mean?

That is quite good. Good meaning to them.

The word Gelid really puts an image. I like how you've made them sound so natural- not forced at all.

Being in Alaska, the first one is automaticly my favorite.

Ooo, these remind me of the examples they use to show how "meaningful" a haiku can be. I especially like the second one, mostly because it has to do with summer and it's so quiet and gentle.