Vigilante

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Holy moly!
You reallly know your military! God, you must never read anything else. It wuold be nice if you cuold continue but what you wrote pretty much summs it up. It was in the future right? I wuold like to hear more about that.

zelithon wrote:Holy moly!
You reallly know your military! God, you must never read anything else.

If you only knew...

You are a crazy avocado and I know some pretty crazy ones. Do you write all of your stories in that format? If you do... You are obsessed.

*skittle biscuit

EDIT: This story takes place on my birth day!!!!!!!! How dare you! I only just relized it. You have 365 days to choose from and you choose MINE. I will kill you.

zelithon wrote:You are a crazy avocado and I know some pretty crazy ones.

What the hell? how much sugar DID you consume today

Zelithon wrote:Do you write all of your stories in that format? If you do... You are obsessed.

*skittle biscuit

Yeah, most of what I write/read has to deal with military history or flying. Sure, call me obsessed!

About the birthday thing...crap, sorry about that. I SWEAR I didn't purposley do that...my b/day is onnthe 19th of January...notice how nothing happens on this date in the story!

I'd up the rating.

If you're speaking of the 'R' content, I tweaked it slightly...hopefully its now up to specs.

I am not actually mad, you know.
I feel speacal a girl got saved from rape on MY birthday. I am the BEST!

so are you gona continue it?

zelithon wrote:I am not actually mad, you know.
I feel speacal a girl got saved from rape on MY birthday. I am the BEST!

so are you gona continue it?

True, but a man got his brains blown out on you birthday, also. Even coming from a prowar, avid reader of war stories, I think that this is definately the darkest, most violent thing I've written. I probably won't continue this...
Sorry to disapoint, Zel.

The Silent Aviator wrote: I probably won't continue this...

dam it, this is the first and best kick ass military stuff i have read, and you go up writ the awsome story and then say well im not gonna finish ...... gaaaaaaaaaaa dotn do that to me..... dam you castinado.....

Dargquon Ql'deleodna wrote:
dam it, this is the first and best kick ass military stuff i have read.

If you're looking for bombs and guns and tanks, this isn't the story for that.This is more of a cop story... I'm in the process of writing a TRUE "military" story [and it will likely kick even more ass;you'll enjoy it].
So, if you really want me to continue Vigilante 2016... I'll consider it.

i mean kick ass rouge type military/cop story and please oh please continue

The guy who got shot in the head was BAD guy anyway. I wannnaknow if he gets caught because the woman saw him.
Also your story is 16+ and you are only 14 .

Look who's talking...you're only 13!
How naughty of you!
Yeah, since both of you demand a sequel, I'll see what I can do...
It could be a while, though.

hmm. I liked this all right. The beginning had all the action, after that it was just explaining the action which I didn't like as much but it was still okay. And I AM sixteen so HA!