Angel horse

An angel should be happy,

That you're an angel too.

She looked down among us,

And she decided you..

I don't know why she did it,

Or why it was so soon.

You were mine only mine,

Not for her to steal.

But it happened anyway,

It was an unexpected deal.

You were an angel horse already to me,

Now your really an angel horse but you had to pass away.

I hope you have fun with your new angel,

galloping freely across the sky.

I thought the beginning was nice, sweet, and clever, but I thought it fell apart more towards the ending. The line "Now your really an angel horse but you had to pass away" not only has an error (you're not your ) but it's also way too long compared to the rest of the poem. I liked the idea though, and if I had to rate it, I'd say 7/10.

I like the overall idea a lot. How you can't keep up with an angel when it comes down to taking someone you love. I like your poem, but I think you could've made the last two lines stronger^^

Your spacing is irregular and not needed. but in all this is how I feel your poem should look like hope you find it useful.

An angel should be happy,
That you're, an angel.
She looked down among us,
And she chose you..
I don't know why,
Or why it was soon.

You were mine and mine only,
Not for her to steal.
But it happened anyway,
It was an unexpected deal.

You were an angel horse already to me,
You really are an angel horse, but you passed away.
I hope you have fun with your new angel,
galloping freely across the skies.

Keep on writing

Nice poem short and sweet.
It flowed smoothly and a bit to quickly I think but its your style of writing and I salute you.
As a review I got nothing great grammar, spelling, and follow up toward the end.
Again I say that I enjoyed this poem and if you could message me if you write anything new and I will be happy to review it should you find the time.