My Doodlebug

I found you the day of Halloween,

I brought you home to start our dream.

We had much fun and a lot of luck,

You started to rear but dared not to buck.

We took you to Sherri's to break your habit,

I was upset with you, I had had it.

You came back to you, we started to win.

We showed all around, you were hardly in your pin.

You were everyone's favorite, we took all the pride,

We were going to state, I was sure of your stride.

You went back to Sherri's to learn one more thing.

Things were going great, till I got that phone ring,

That you were down and needed me.

I rushed right up but saw no glee.

You laid in my arms and died peacefully.

I cried and cried, things were not heavenly.

Things are still wrong, it will never be the same.

I still cry over you, we never knew the blame.

I want to pet you one last time,

Or even see one more pick of you in your prime.

I wish you were here, you never knew,

You were the best partner ever Spencer, I love you.


(Spencer was born in 2001 and died in 2009. He was my real all around paint show horse. We won many high points and earned the name of being a true team.)

I'm really sorry about your horse!

At first when I was reading it, I was thinking about a dog or something, then at the end, I was like, "Oh! It's a horse!"

I liked how it had a good rhythm and rhyme to it. I always love a good rhyming poem! I saw no grammatical errors or anything.

In all, it was an awesome, and emotional poem. I loved how you put your heart into it. Keep it up! (I just hope you don't have to write any more poetry about the death of loved ones)

-Emily

This is a great poem an very emotional. I am really sorry about your horse. I don't think you should change anything majior.I liked the ryhmes some of them just a litte bit forced, but besides that it was awesome. Unlike eab 10 I was pretty sure it was a horse the whole time. .. Sory I couldn't help more
A. S.