Heartbreak

Oh cruelest irony.
Thou hast rapèd my heart
Stripped me of my values
And left me drowning in a sea of despair.

What have I done to upset thee?
Nothing have I ever said.
No crime have I ever committed
That would lead you to such horrific action.

And yet here I am
Stripped bare of all morals
Gasping for air, my last breath
And sinking. Sinking. Forever sinking.

This poem is awesome! I like the title. It fits. I didn't see any grammatical errors or anything. So, yeah. I didn't have any personal issues with it. Overall, it was a great poem to read. It gave me this sense of depression as I read it. I like reading things that bring out emotion in me. Nice! Keep it up!

-Emily

I liked this piece, and I have to say I loved how you incoporated Ye Olde English into the poem. I love those old Shakesperian words.
Your poem is actually pretty well structured and your words seemed to flow very easily throughout the poem.

SammyMercury wrote:Oh cruelest irony.
Thou hast rapèd my heart
Stripped me of my values
And left me drowning in a sea of despair.

I definitely think your first stanza was my favorite. Very descriptive and you picked really good words to use!
Keep writing,
Jane