The Path

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***A quick write, feel free to tear it apart.

I walk the road, nowhere to go,
Simply happy and on my way;
For where I'll be
In history
Is not for me to say.
But I suppose my footsteps on
This path I choose to take
Won't wash away
In the fray
Of life's ongoing wake.
So I walk much slower than
The others on this road.
My steps are wary,
But my heart will carry
Me far beyond where others will ever go.
Reading is one form of escape. Running for your life is another. ~Lemony Snicket




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I really liked reading this poem. The title was really fitting, and the whole thing was really flowing together like a miniature story. I found no issues with it except for one:

StoryWeaver13 wrote:Me far beyond where others will ever go.

I didn't see any errors in it, but I just didn't understand it. If you, or anyone else who feels like it, could explain this line, I would be grateful.
Thanks!
Aside from that, it was awesome and I enjoyed reading it!

-Emily
"A stranger in a strange land" ~ Exodus 2:22




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I liked your poem! It was inspirational in a way!



Lots of times you have to pretend to join a parade in which you're not really interested in order to get where you're going.
— Christopher Darlington Morley