Dawn & Dusk Final Chapter!!!

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Okay, well, I write in sections so this is the last chapter.....no he wont be gone forever!
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I sat down, wondering why Cameron was acting so weird. I looked up into those beautiful midnight blue eyes that I loved, and there was sadness. I opened my mouth to speak, but he put his finger to my lips.

"Shh. I don't want this to be any harder than it is...and it's hard enough." He said, quietly, looking at me with such intensity, I could only nod. Silently, I prayed Please don't let it be what I think it is.Please just let it be something else.

After a long pause, Cameron spoke, "They're making me leave". I swallowed, hoping that it was a dream. "Who?" I asked, sullenly.

"The angels... The-they...found out. About us." He started, his voice cracking, " I think that Jason told them something." Jason is Cameron's brother, but he is a fallen angel.


My throat burned, and my eyes were threatening to spill tears. "They can't take you away from me!" I said, almost screaming, and the tears I tried so hard to contain, spilt.

"Skylar, please don't cry. You know that I love you, and now, so does everyone else." Cameron said, wiping away my tears with his long fingers. His eyes were glossy with unshed tears. I heard something shatter, and it took me a while to comprehend that it wasn't my heart, but a window. There was a huge storm going on outside, and because of the storm in my mind, I hadn't even noticed it.

"Please," I whispered, "Don't go." He looked down, and then at me and said, "I'm sorry...The storm won't stop until I leave..." He walked over to the shattered window, and jumped.

I hadn't noticed that I stood up until I felt myself falling. I heard a soft whisper in the dying wind and looked up.. In the place that Cameron had been standing, was a soft white feather.

The words that had been whispered were still in my mind. I love you. I stood up and walked over to the feather, and picked it up. My tears were flowing rapidly as I looked outside and only saw the stars.
Last edited by BottomlessEyes on Sat Jul 17, 2010 11:14 pm, edited 2 times in total.
Clouded Skies Cover Everything
I can no longer see
Why go on?


Light thinks it travels faster than anything, but it is wrong, no matter how fast light travels,it finds the darkness has always gotten there first and is waiting for it.
—Terry Pratchett




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OMG i love it!!!!
you showed me this yesterday at school but i didnt read the ending!!!!!
hehehehehe
love ya!!!
i hope you know that as i write this...i can see you across the room!!! :elephant:
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This was just captivating. :)

I heard something shatter, and it took me a while to comprehend that it wasn't my heart, but a window.


This made me shiver. I really liked the sentence.

Jason is Cameron's brother, but he is a fallen angel.


This sentence is a little too direct for me. It feels like there is so much information missing. Does Jason not like Cameron? Why is he a fallen angel? It would be wonderful to get to know a little more about Jason.

"Shh. I don't want this to be any harder than it is...and it's hard enough." He said, quietly, looking at me with such intensity, I could only nod.


The end of the quote should look like: ...and it's hard enough," he said...

Overall, wonderful job! It's a bit confusing, because I don't know all of the story, but I was completely upset over the separation of Lilith and Cameron. It sounds like they were so in love.

~Mira
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