More than Flower

In that little burst
little burst of color
What is there to see?
What else could be fuller?

Look at it again
Look inside the heart
What could there be hidden?
Is it being smart?

More than any old flower
that is what I see
magical, mysterious
Whatever can it be?

Hi. You should continue on this poem. Descibe more. Why does it look magical and mysterious? What colour is this flower? In the beginning, you write "In that little burst little burst of color", is the repetition of "little burst intentional? Maybe you could mention that the little burst of colour is from the flower's brightly coloured petals in the beginning so the reader will know that they're reading about a flower right away.
Overall, expand. Continue on the imagery that you see. Tell us what you saw, remember, we weren't there with you. We don't know what the flower looks like.

-Crescent

Hey, I agree with Cresent in that there could be more detail and depth, but even as a poem on its own it's pretty good. There is one line though, that I have an issue with. "Is it being smart". It seems like maybe you couldn't think of anything else that rhymed, correct me if I'm wrong. It doesn't seem to really fit or make sense. Maybe you could change that one line just to keep the flow. But otherwise it's really good

Yeah, you're right. I did put it there just to rhyme. I think I'll be rewriting the poem soon!

Bluey

hello there, Blue!

Your poem's short and you really have to make it long because it seems that you left it hanging!

In that little burst
little burst of color
What is there to see?
What else could be fuller?

um.... one thing. Repetitions.you kind of repeated "little burst" in two lines.

Anyway, your poem's good but you need to make it longer to sense and know really what is the message of your poem.

Keep writing!