The Harp

I like!
I'm not very good at reviewing, ha ha.
So that's all I got...

Okay... To be short and sweet:

"Beautiful plucked strings."

When you write a poem without grammar and punctuation, your intention is to let the phrasing and the sounds speak for themselves. Your opening line, "Beautiful plucked strings," gives just that-- a beautiful, rolling-off-the-tongue grace that epitomizes the sound of a harp.

The only issues I'd like to bring up is that, other than that line and its respective repetitions, the remainder of the poem strays just a bit from the 'gliding' sound. But all-in-all, this is wonderful for its purpose. Four stars!

Hmm, well you should try using punctation or grammar, between lines to make the flow easier or atleast transition words or soemthing like that. That's all I got, sorry.

Hey Ellie ^^ Shina here I just popped on to YWS and saw you posted a poem.

This poem for me had its ups and downs. Certain lines stuck out to me because of their simplicity and mystery, but several others didn't seem to fit well with the poem.

beautiful plucked strings
calm audiences
for some it's the prettiest
music they heard

The first line is kind of pretty, but mostly due to the sharpness like Lumierre mentioned. However, beautiful is kind of... Well, it's vague. Are the plucked strings beautifull? Or the sound they make?

However, you jump from that nice line, to "calm audiences" to "for some it's the prettiest music they heard", which not only has a grammar error, but it's also unrelated. It seems like you're saying the calm audiences are the "prettiest music they heard." Prettiest isn't a very descriptive word, either. So you may want to consider using more descriptive words that create an image in the reader's mind. Besides, you can't really describe music accurately using the word "pretty."

Lastly, "music they heard" should be "music they've heard" I believe.

they're amazed
that the soothing melody
is played by one girl

Again, there's not very much interesting description here. You can play it up while keeping it simple, you know? Also, the "played by one girl" I really dislike. Why? Because it's like visiting the YA fiction section all over again where the main characters are automatically these amazing people. Maybe the way her fingers flutter across the strings or the grace in which she handles the instrument would catch their attention. It's up to you.

she keeps her harp outside of concerts
plays it before she goes to sleep

Eh,you'd probably already guess that. If she's good enough to play at a concert, she must practice, right? And playing it right before she sleeps seems a bit dramatic. Most musical prodigies play whenever they want, not necessarily before they go to bed. What's the point of that, anyway?

it soothes her
and the highest note
she plays with ease

Repition of "soothes." And it bothers me that it's so easy for her. Where's the story in this poem? Is it just about how she's so good and fabulous with her harp?

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Overall:
The main problems would have to be the meat of the poem. What's the story? What's the moral? Also, the description. When you read something and you can only hear the words, you know it's in need of some sensory description.

Hope that helps ^^
-Shina

It's a nice first try, and you've got a good start going on here, but I think there are some things you still need to tinker with:

for some it's the prettiest
music they heard

After the first two lines, these seemed a bit too plain; your sentence doesn't flow, and is rather cumbersome. Try rearranging the sentence so it rolls off the tongue easier: it makes it easier for the reader to stay in the poem, as well as make it sound better.

I have a similar problem with the third stanza. You convey what you want to say, but it comes off in a rather lackluster way - the "played by one girl" especially sounds awkward.

Finally, the inversion in

and the highest note
she plays with ease

also sounds awkward: when you're setting punctuation aside, it's often better to keep to more straightforward sentence structures, because otherwise the sentence turns clunky.

I also agree with Shina's point: there isn't much of a story in this, at least as far as content goes. Exploring the ideas a bit more would be worth looking into.

It's great for a first time writing this way though. Keep it up, and I hope this helps.

Alright Ellie! Here we go...

beautiful plucked strings
calm audiences
for some it's the prettiest
music they heard

This whole stanza to me, it's just ehh. You say it's the prettiest music they heard? It's bland and boring, I want more! I want to know how it's pretty, how it's beautiful, what it sounds like, what feelings does it provoke in the listeners? Also I would change it to "Beautifully" and "The prettiest music they've (or they) ever heard"

they're amazed
that the soothing melody
is played by one girl

she keeps her harp outside of concerts
plays it before she goes to sleep

it soothes her
and the highest note
she plays with ease

Now you paint a good picture here, it's nice, but it kind of feels like to me that it's just the bare bones of a poem. There's not much to really sink your teeth into, no real poeticness to it if that makes any sense. Instead of just telling us, let us relate to it, show us in a poetic way how the scene is.

I hope you get what I mean, I'm sort of in a rush xD

Keep writing,

~Hope

It is very nice! I really like the way you use the non-rhyme and non-rythmic form very well. I also like the way you kept it nice and simple.

However, I would like to say that when you have not put it in a repeating, rythmic pattern,you need to make it flow more. Right now, the whole poem is not very pleasing to the ear.

Keep up the good work, but I would suggest reading it to someone, maybe a parent, sibling, or friend, and asking how pleasing it is to their ears. If it isn't REVISE!