A Billet-doux

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Nice poem... yet, there are some issues to be raised...

The way the lines go on, it bores me to be straight with you. You connect each one okay, but the basic and, if im honest, bad rhyming scheme that you have going on, doesn't blend well with my ears... tastebuds, par-say. :p

Yet, this is a comfy poem and i get the message clearly.

Keep Writing, and try to focus on connecting your sentences better

As I opened my eyes and saw the attractive sunshine

I saw "attractive", and I winced. Attractive is just not a word you use to describe sunshine. It just struck me as very off. I think this first line would be much stronger if you dropped the "attractive" and kept things simple.

The man I’m dreaming of is here with me in the bed

Tense shift. It's very jarring.

His handsome brown eyes and perfect lines

That do/are what? Fragment.

Then I turned and noticed he wasn’t here, caressing my head

Tense shift again, and an obviously forced rhyme.

I stood up and looked up those flying birds

The first "up" is a bit redundant, and it's too close to the "up" of "look up". In order to stand, you have to get up. I suggest deleting it.

Witnessed a white envelope, a billet-doux

In order to witness something, it must happen in front of you. Envelopes don't happen; they're just there, and you have to actively look at them to see them. Basically, "witnessed" is not the word to use here.

Thinking of him, he revolves around my world
Looking outside, the flowers bloom

How are these two lines related to one another and the rest of the stanza? I espy another forced rhyme.

But he will go, becoming a father

Will go, must go, or has gone?

I know our compassionate relationship won’t last

"Compassionate" is the completely wrong word to use here. Dictionaries are your friend. Use them, please.

Heartbroken and didn’t notice tears on my cheeks
Knowing I was stupid and I laughed

The tense shifts in these lines make them incoherent.

Being left by the man, my faith and love to him weeps

How can faith and love weep? How come they are mentioned only in this last line and not elsewhere in the poem.

Overall, you have a number of misused words and tense shifts that this poem was difficult to understand. In addition, you also have such bad punctuation, it makes the poem even more difficult to read. I didn't point any of the punctuation out because there were too many errors. In general, poetry follows the same punctuation conventions as prose. A good way to make sure your poem is punctuated properly is to rewrite it in prose format, check the punctuation, and then reformat it back into a poem.

One thing I did like was how you subverted the billet-doux. I thought that was a nice touch.

Hey. I like the title to your poem.
There was a contradiction. You said that the man was there with you in bed, but then all of the sudden you say he's not there. It's a nice idea though. Like Kyllorac said, you misused some words which made it slightly confusing. Also the trasition to for the girl to being having an affair was also a bit sudden.

-Crescent