Take me

Fly like an eagle,swim like a fish
Take me on your journey,
so I can leave this rubbish
Take me to the rainbows, take me to the butterflies
Take me to the place where I can see his eyes
Take me to the waterfalls.
Take me to the place,
where happiness calls
Take me with you,
I can't stay here now...
All I've got left is a painful sin and a broken vow

interesting.

thnx..I don't think its one of my best ones tough

It reminded me of that song that's like FLY LIKE AN EAGLE SO MY SPIRIT CAN BE FREE
I liked it... nice flow... although I wouldn't capitalize Take before that butterflies thing, after the comma.
Painful (usually words ending with -ful aren't double L'ed.

It sounded like a sad lullaby. I liked it.

-Elizabeth

Thnx

short and very sweet.
does your name mean somethiing related to the moon (as in a Hindi word??)
i'm really curious.

I like it. It's pretty and short and has good rhythm.

Thank you guys..I really worked on this poem before i posted it so I guess my Hard worked is paid