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Last edited by BigM on Mon Jan 24, 2011 7:13 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Short, but interesting. There was something about your wording that seemed very meticulous to me, and I liked your comparisons and such. Although the "two worlds" thing is quite a cliche (hard to avoid in romance, I know) there's potential for making this unique. Keep on writing, and message me when more of this is finished. I'm not a fan of romance really, but I'm curious...keep writing.
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Short. Interesting. I'd love to read more.
It seems like you're talking a bit more about the tree than the weed. Balance it out.
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Hey BigM!

First of all, a nitpick! Weeds convert carbon dioxide to oxygen as well! In fact, most of the oxygen produced on this Earth is by grass... which is what category your dandelion seed would grow into! So that doesn't quiet work.

Also, what do you mean by love existing between an old oak and a dandelion seed? How would love even come about? As this is a story, I expect this relationship to be developed, as peculiar as that might sound!

Also, the message is a bit weird. Right now, it sounds like a Harold and Maude sort of thing going on... a bit weird, if you know what I mean!
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