hi i do have another story on here but i need to complete the first chapter so i would like a review on this story if youu can x
Past
Izabella-Willow-Rose
“Who is he?” I had thought sat in the corner of the table in the far side of the learning area he sat facing me on the table across from us he did not look eleven…striking green eyes and scruffy but neat coal black hair. All the girls were looking towards him giggling and then looking at me because I was the one his lime green eyes were looking at I didn’t know what to do it looked as if he was looking at me for reassurance he was defiantly scared and I don’t blame him if he was going to settle in with this class he had to be scared,. It was just the beginning of the year and I was just doing my usual thing hiding in the corner why everyone shouts and screams, when Jake arrived I don’t know why the shouting and screaming didn’t get a lot, louder (Jake is the the one with lime green eyes and scruffy black hair) it was a hard morning that day Jake just kept looking at me I got told of because I had hardly done any work. As break time became closer I over heard Jake asking a boy sat next to him about me and these were his words “well she hardly ever talks, she’s clever though and rumours that her foster family abuse her when there not leaving her by herself while living it out in Malibu or something…” he looked shocked and uncomfortable “wow” he whispered then he looked at me with piercing green eyes I just kept my head down and tried to write.
Later on at break I was sat reading at a table when someone sat down at the table next to me I dared to look up at hoped it wasn’t Jake but I shouldn’t of dared and shouldn’t of hoped he stood looking at me and then took a seat I looked down towards the table and murmured “hi” he said hi back at started at me…this was really awkward what was so interesting about me, them something totally cliché happened I was saved by the bell I made my way over to the corner table and sat at the back for the rest of the day trying to concentrate, it didn’t go well…
Later that day I was walking around the city buying food for myself ( the thing about my foster parents living out in Malibu was right) and as I was walking out of the shop I banged into Jake we stared at each other for a second then both said hi to each other then an awkward silence hit I looked down at the floor and then he asked me : “ your Izabella-Willow Rose aren’t you ?” I looked up to Jake and decided to act normal, “ yea it’s a bit of a mouthful isn’t it?” he laughed then looked down at me and said “ I can defiantly agree on that but it’s abit of a coincidence” I looked at him confused and asked what did he find a coincidence he answered my question with ease “ my family have moved into a mansion in the centre of the forest and it happens to be called Isabella Mansion behind it is a lake going by the name of Rose lake and the whole land is surrounded by willow trees..” I was gobsmaked then answered “that is a coincidence”
I realy liked this story,it's interesting,but short, you definately have to write more. I like the coincidence thing, that was cute. 