Hidden emotion- Comments wanted please!

I can't help looking at you, but when you look at me I turn away.
I feel so shy when I catch your eye,
But I can't help looking at you.
Do you feel the same?
I'm too afraid to know.
Am I falling for you, or is it just a crush?
Should I listen to my head or is my heart what I should trust?
As I look at your innocent smile and beautiful eyes
I see deep thoughts and hidden lies.
Why do I feel this way, why are words hard to say?
Maybe I'll know in time, when maybe you'll be mine.

Your rhythm (is there any?) is sporadic

Your innocent smile and beautiful eyes
Gives me a funny feeling inside

These lines are cliché

Overall... simple, short, and sweet


-Amice-

To capitilize the 'I' or not to; that is the question your poem presents! Go with one or the other, but don't go with both. My suggestion: capitalize all 'I's.' A lower case 'I' is just way too conspicious.

I think that is a very personal piece, and thus it's hard to relate to or even review. Your describing emotions from within, and posing questions that you're trying to answer. It's a good glimpse into another soul, but it's hard to relate to.

Wow, I can really relate to this poem!!! It was nice a short and sweet, and I don't think I could have done it any better....lol...we must have something in common! Yeah, as soon as I read this poem, I was like...hang on, that sounds like me!!!

Sorry to say, but the idea is very stereotypical. Nothin new to anyone. It's cliched... ugh I hate using or hearing that word but it is. I personally didn't like all the questions in it. It's ok.