The Meadow

In the meadow,
The rain falls and never stops,
Keeping the grass green and the sun down.

The birds stay in their nests,
The squirrels in their trees,
Never leaving their home to get fuddled.

But soon, the star shall be out,
Bringing an arc of spectral colors,
Beaming brightly upon the glade.

In the meadow,
The sun shines and rainbows glow,
Keeping the grass green and the rain away.

Hello, Bailey Holcomb. Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem.
First, can I just point out that your avatar is epic? Totally unrelated, but it's epic.

Moving on, then.
The only thing that really needs work in your poem, in my opinion, is the last line.

"Leaving the grass green and the rain away."
I don't think the verb (leaving) works very well with the recipient of the action (the rain). If you take out the stuff in the middle, the line reads "Leaving... the rain away." I don't think that makes terribly much sense.

I do like a lot of things about the poem. I think you nailed the length- not too short, not too long. It has a sort of charming air to it, this pleasant, youthful feel with descriptions that make me see the thing clearly in my head. A very nice poem, overall.
Hope this helps!

Hello Bailey! I, too, love your avatar. ^_^

In the first stanza-- how does never-ending rainfall keep the sun from rising? You might be trying to say that, metaphorically, rain symbolizes gloom and sun symbolizes hope/happiness, and the gloom overpowers the happiness. If so, that's cool, too. But right now the poem is too literal for that metaphor to come across with all the underlying meaning. I'll touch more on this later.

The second stanza does nothing for me, honestly. It's repetitive and has very little imagery or meaning for us to hold on to. Try taking that core idea-- creatures staying home to keep safe --and transform it into something a bit more poetic. You could try to explain why not being fuddled matters, what safety and security mean to the people and animals of the earth and why they are important. It's a powerful idea, but, again, too muddled up by the clunky word choice and lack of imagery.

The third stanza begins to get better. "Arc of spectral colors" is the best (or closest thing to) imagery you have in the poem, bringing up a true image that readers can envision and grasp. Why only one star? Is the fact that there's only one star significant? There are more than one star in the night sky, so justify that. Also, I don't like the use of the word "upon". It makes the line seem uppity and a bit stuffy, if that makes sense.

The fourth stanza contains the best thing in the poetry, for me-- the repetition of "keeping the grass green". I'm not sure if you intended for the underlying metaphorical consequences of that repetition, but it means that the sun and the rain (gloom and happiness) are both needed to keep the grass green, and that subtle but powerful idea is the most interesting thing in the poem. However, the fourth stanza still doesn't have much imagery.

All in all, you need to use your poetic license! Scrap the strict capitalization. Not every line needs a capital letter. Focus less on rhythm, and having each line the same length, or any of the technical stuff, and figure out what you want the poem's essence to focus on. If you find a focal point (the gloom-and-happiness-are-both-necessary thing, or the fact that a star is bringing light to the meadow) and spin your imagery off of that. Use similes, metaphors, pretty words-- poetry needs to bleed emotion, and this poem is a bit too prim and proper to be bleeding anything. ^_~

This is something you can work off of and improve. Keep writing!

~Evi