Serendipity.

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Serendipity.
All the random pieces coming together
in one beautiful, enlightened moment.
Did you used to believe, too?

Serendipitous.
Two random people coming together
in one beautiful, foolish moment.
Did you think we weren't too young?

I named the child Poetry, after the sound of your voice.
She speaks with spinning infinity, just like the look in your eyes.
She loves like the trees love the sun, just like they were the day we were together.
The day we became serendipity.

Was it really random?
Or is random not random at all?

She was born the first of October, just like you might've wanted.
She looks at the sky and puts it back together, just like you might've wanted.
She showed me all is beautiful, just like we might've been.




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i love the word serindipity. its so fun to say!!!

i like this. it has a very natural feel, the way you worded it is lovely. its very scattered, which you probably intended, but i dont know... it kind of feels like you may have crossed the line between thought- provoking and confusing, just because it jumps around so much. sorry i cant be more specific. :(

but its very cool. i love these 2 stanzas:


Serendipitous.
Two random people coming together
in one beautiful, foolish moment.
Did you think we weren't too young?

I named the child Poetry, after the sound of your voice.
She speaks with spinning infinity, just like the look in your eyes.
She loves like the trees love the sun, just like they were the day we were together.
The day we became serendipity.

keep writing!! 8)
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Wow, I love the flow on this. Like RiverGirl says, it feels really natural. I like how the word serendipity ties it all together. A happy accident is what it means, right?

I named the child Poetry, after the sound of your voice.
She speaks with spinning infinity, just like the look in your eyes.
She loves like the trees love the sun, just like they were the day we were together.
The day we became serendipity.


This stanza is really gorgeous. :)
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wow! just wow! lol i really really loved it! i agree with jennafina! that stanza really is brilliant! i also loved

'she looks at the sky and puts it back together'

really really well done!
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Thanks you all so much! I honestly didn't think this was good (honest) but I'm glad y'all liked it.



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