Adverbs

Post-its sit
On a dim wall,
Yellow;
Teasingly,
They tug at your memory
Before setting your feet in concrete,
Inescapably;
Innocently,
They watch you struggle.
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A random little poem that I hope you liked!
Reviews appreciated.
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~Durr

Hey Durriedog!

First of all, I would cut out the smiley. Why? Because if you have to put in the middle of a poem, that probably means that you're not describing it properly.

Next of all, you described the post-its, but you forgot to describe the purpose of those post-its. Why are they there? What do they have on them? Instead of using random adverbs to describe something which may possibly be relevant to the poem, describe what is actually relevant to your poem. Then it'll seem much cooler.

I quite like this poem but I'm not sure what your point is. What exactly are you trying to say with this poem? I mean, I like the way it's written but I think it needs a bit more, so that the reader has a better idea of what you mean - why are they teasing, why are you stuck and struggling? Plus, do post-its sit, or do they sort of hang, or dangle? I think you just need to add a bit more to this to help the reader understand.

Haha, thanks! This poem just came to me one afternoon and I wrote it down in my Scribbles Book, it's awesome that I can expand on it and make it better now! Thanks guys!