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A date with History, scene one

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By the way, guys, if you are reading this, make sure you read the prologue FIRST!!
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Scene 1, Act 1 A Mugging in the 80's


After the dizzolve of 80's music, the stage is lit up and there is a wall. On this wall three teenagers are leaning. Infront of them is a radio which is playing, softly.
Teen one: Hey, guys, I've got some news
Teen two and three: What?
Teen one: I've got a car
Teen three:Bored I know, I've seen it
Teen one: What do you think of it?
Teen three: It's rubbish
Teen one:Exclaming It's a brand new Renault 9! How can you say that it is rubbish?
Teen three: The fact that it's a Renault. They never last!
Teen one: Cloughter's R4 has!
Teen three:Shouting That's because he never uses it!
Teen one:Shouting My car is good!
Teen three:Shouting, raising his fist No it's not!
Teen two steps between them before they start punching
Teen two:Shouting the loudest COOL IT!Quieter God! We're so bored that we are fighting eachother! If we are not careful, the pigs will be on our backs
Teen one: You're right
Teen three: I agree.Bored But what is there to do around here?
At this moment The Policeman walks on, stage left
The Policeman:Suspiciously What are you doing?
Teen one: We aren't doing nothing
The Policeman: Really
Teen two: Yeah
The Policeman: Make sure it stays that way, or else
Teen three: Okay
The Policeman searches them all and walks off, satisfied, stage right
Teen one:Mimicking Make sure it stays that way
Others laugh
Teen three: Who does he think he is? I mean-
Teen one:Interrupting Shush, I can hear something
The sound is of footsteps, coming toward them, stage left. Enter the Yuppie
Yuppie:Talking into a mobile phone the size of a brick Yor, I am just standing in the middle of a deadbeat town, yor. I am on Regent's Avanue, yor
The Teenagers are all looking at the Yuppie
Teen one:Whispering A Yuppie!
Teen three:Also whispering A damn Yuppie!
Teen two:Whispering to Teen one How dare he say that our town is deadbeat! Let's go for him!
Teen one: Easy, Brian, easy
Teen three: Yeah, wait till he stops talking on his phoneWhispering and then we get him!
The Yuppie: Yor, okay, so I'll meet you there, oh and by the way, you won't belive this, but there are three scruffy looking urchins looking at me! I know, still I'll see you, yeah, ok yor!He puts his phone in his breifcase[To the teeagers] What are you looking at?
After he says this, the Teenagers jump at him and start punching and kicking him
Teen two:While punching him That's for calling our town deadbeat!
Teen one and three: Yeah
When the Yuppie falls unconcious they start to rummage through his breifcase
The Policeman:Offstage, shouting Oi, what do you think you are doing?
Teen one: Scarper!
As the Teenagers run off, the Policeman runs on, shouting
The Policeman:Running to the Yuppie Young hooligans!To the Yuppie Right, lets see how you are!
He gets his walkie talkie out of his jacket
The Policeman:Into the walkie talkie Mable, we've got a situation
The action on the stage freezes, the stage darkens. The Old Man walks on with a spotlight on him. The Yuppie and policeman have disappeared
Old Man: And that is the 80's now covered. We shall now travel back further. To the 60's
The stage darkens. A dizzolve of 60's music can be heard. When the stage lights up again, it is separated in two. On sidelooks like a lounge, while the other is a child's bedroom
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For those of you who don't know. A Yuppie was a "Young-Upwardly mobilie-person"
"Madness rides the Star wind"

HP Lovecraft. Ironic, no?




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Hmm. Interesting.

This isn't too bad a take on the 80s, but you could probably do a little more describing at the beginning. Tell us what the square looks like, other than a wall and radio; tell me what the teens are wearing, and the policeman, and the yuppie... A little more detail might help me picture this better.

And do you think you could separate the cues/descriptions from the actual quoting a little more? I know that, where I'm from, they put the cues/descriptions in parentheses... But I can't tell you exactly what to do; we all have different styles of writing, and, if this is yours, I will respect that.

But still. An interesting idea for a play. :wink:
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Thanks! I've just been playing with this cocept for a while now, so I think I shall carry it on! Onward to the 60's! :smt004
"Madness rides the Star wind"

HP Lovecraft. Ironic, no?



Grief, I’ve learned, is really just love. It’s all the love you want to give, but cannot. All that unspent love gathers up in the corners of your eyes, the lump in your throat, and in that hollow part of your chest. Grief is just love with no place to go.
— Jamie Anderson