the older the night the colder the chills as they break through my skin, spine like ice plopping into a simmering pot in winter, orange sweatshirts in snow and thoughts of yesterday still rising like elevators in my back.
Hi! There are a lot of ideas crammed into this poem, loads of imagery, and I like it. I like the idea of nights being old. It sounded to me like an old night would be one thatis an old memory, and the further into the past, the more vivid or colder the memory is. That's just how I interpreted it. I'm not sure about the word "plopping", it does seem to fit the image you're making, it just reminds me of something else, I guess. I like the image of vivid orange against white, and the whole poem flows well. Good job.