You are my shop

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you are mine as the dad said on born day
you support families like god do day to day
never say a word just want oil to run to work
i imaginary you as the first born brother
never forget the day when touch your feet blessings
i imaginary hand of yours on my head hath to teach
you taught to talk to run in business to dad, of course me too
i think it ambition of yours too
i call you my shop but truly you more than it
you not the way to earn way to learn
i would leave you fr something new learn in life
but don't forget your are mine as the dad said on born day
My lust for knowledge can do whatever it wants.

Love is life and life is writing.




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Please, don't feel offended by this, but are you English? Your work sounds like it's been put through a lingual translater; and not a good one.

I can decipher some of it, I'm guessing you're talking about somebody who you love, but they're more than that because they're your destiny. I can't work out how that in any way can translate to 'you are my shop.'

It was interesting to decipher, but I'm afraid there is little advice to offer on something like this. Capitalise your I's, a few of the first lines, and add some punctuation.
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