Shadows -Part 1

The reflection of the sunlight glistened like watery fire; the little ripples from the waterfall swam like slippery eels on the surface. She perched herself on a rock and drew out a pencil and her sketchbook from her backpack. Her crossed legs balanced the book on her lap as she laid the tip of the led on to the piece of paper, her hand moved swiftly across the sheet. When she was done sketching the view of the waterfall that fell like blue dust flowing down from heaven and how the clouds danced around the sky as if they were ballerinas… all of a sudden the paradise started to fade, it was like she being was pulled out of her heaven and sucked back into the dark depths of hell.

Yo,
nice beginning, the last sentence is a bit confused,perhaps should divide it into two. Also the book on the legs - are the legs balancing the book, or is she balancing it on her legs?
Keep going:)

First I want to say I loved it, I could imagine everything so clearly and I liked how you added a sense of mystique to the main character by not mentioning her name. However, there are a few mistakes:

The reflection of the sunlight glistened like watery fire; the little ripples from the waterfall swam like slippery eels on the surface.

You used two double-barrel adjectives, which kind of cloggs up the writing. How about just "eels"?

laid the tip of the led on

Did you mean "lead"?

When she was done sketching the view of the waterfall that fell like blue dust flowing down from heaven and how the clouds danced around the sky as if they were ballerinas… all of a sudden the paradise started to fade, it was like she being was pulled out of her heaven and sucked back into the dark depths of hell.

This is a little clumsy. What happens when she was done sketching? I would say: When she was done sketching the view of the waterfall that fell like blue dust flowing down from heaven, and how the clouds danced around the sky as if they were ballerinas, paradise started to fade. It was like she was being was pulled out of her heaven and sucked back into the dark depths of hell
Aside from that, I thought it was great, loved all the personification

Nice. Interesting. I want more. You leave the reader with a very good cliffhanger.