Normal or Something Like it Chap 3

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Wheadee
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Fri Feb 12, 2010 8:39 pm
Wheadee says... · Fri Feb 12, 2010 8:39 pm
I AM PULLING THIS NOVEL DOWN FROM THE SITE
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Fri Feb 12, 2010 9:49 pm
winie603 says... · Fri Feb 12, 2010 9:49 pm
You really have a knack for dialogue! I can really see the characters talking in my own bedroom :D I thought this was rather good, so I read the first and second chapters as well. I have to admit, It was a bit too Twilight for me BUT you've got the talent. One thing you could improve is using the five senses! XD It's the same with me, I love dialogue but I can't descbribe anything else! I'm looking forward to the rest, so just PM me when you post it up. Hope this helped!
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