Losing the Talent to Write

I feel a part of me is dying
Yet nothing's being born anew.
I just want the gift back I once had,
Which was given to me by you.
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It fades away like the day tide
But it's not coming back up.
Why is this thing rubbing away?
I can't write well with blind luck.
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It runs away like a child
But has nowhere to go.
I wish I could coax it back,
But how to I don't know.
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And I can feel its mark,
Emptiness it left.
I need to fill the spot
Where I sense its death.
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I need to save you
Don't leave me please.
I cannot stay sane,
Cannot release.
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Stay with me sense,
I love you.
I can't say bye
No adiou.
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You are mine,
I'm yours,
Slave to you,
Your lores.
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Dying
Please
Don't go,
Sieze. 
  

Wow I really really enjoyed this piece! Especially how you started with complex stanzas and continued to end with one word phrases.
I'm not expert on poetry but I can truly say this is really good One of my favorites.

Good job and keep writing!

You are definitely not losing the talent to write.
I do have a couple of suggestions for you..

And I can feel its mark

And I can feel it's mark
Sometimes I have the exact same feeling expressed in this poem. I think your talent is hungry for new ideas.
I think it has good rhythm.
Keep writing

Fiction

Your writing talent seems to have resurrected in this piece! (see what i did there?) I can completely relate, as i feel that writing is so a part of me, verbs pump through my viens. One question, who is the 'you' you're talking about?

Inspiration

I love this.. the way it dwindles off into one word sentences at the end is really cool.

I'm really no expert at poetry, but I thought I'd add a couple thoughts:

But how to I don't know.

Awkward line here. Is there a way to rephrase it?

Ooh... fiction pointed out something... Normally, I try not to comment on other reviews, but "it's" is one of those weird, tricky words. "It's" is actually a contraction of "it is" and "its" is possessive.

Ok, other than that, this is very inspiring. Not sure why, but it is. Excellent rhythm!

Lupis

i feel like this person, i too am losing the talent to write. people like what i wrote when i was eleven better than what i right now anyway, i liked this peice.

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Sometimes we all feel this way. I am no poet, but that was pretty doggone good!
Keep up the good work!

fiction903 wrote:

And I can feel its mark

And I can feel it's mark

Fiction

>.> No apostrophe. Litehawk had it right. XD
However, I do not think you have lost any talent, dear. ^^ this is very good. However, we all go through stages where we seem to get stuck and everything comes out wrong, just stick at it.

I enjoyed this. For goodness' sake. Don't stop writing. XD

-Nutty

Thanks guys, it's just been so hard to write lately, I don't know why.

Maybe it's something in the air. I've been having trouble too! Writing something different helps. The other day I realised I've been continuously attempting to write a novel for at least seven years. A little burn out?

The idea of it slowly getting simpler and simpler is a pretty interesting one, I do like the poem and I do not think there's something I could point out. So simply, a gold star from me =) Or so it was in the old times.

Hello,

Well-written and well-portrayed. Can't really nitpick since it's a thing most of us can relate to and you've let us take away the affect so there's no question that your poem's a success. I'd probably just revise punctuation because I think the odd bit read a little choppy, easily fixed if you replace a couple of periods/full-stops with semi-colons. The fluency is top-notch otherwise.

Keep it up,
Ben

I loved this poem! Probably every writer can relate to this. Its so true, and I wish it never stopped. I do think it ended a bit abruptly but other then that it was perfect! Keep writing because you are very gifted.