Fox Hill part 1

Samantha stared at the gates of her new school. The front gates were once black, and shiny, but now rust covered the gates. The front building was made of bricks that were crumbling. The grass was yellow, and dying. She took a step and looked up at the tall gate which at the top had read FOX HILL COLLEGE. She sighed. This was all she could afford. But when she looked it up online she found nothing. She never knew this existed.She opened the gate as she did it made a speaking noise. She shuddered, but kept walking. She opened the wooden door to the office. It smelled, and was dark inside. She called out "H-hello?" She called. She waited, but got no answer. She looked over the front desk. She saw a chair, it had webs on them. But she saw something else a skeleton. She held her breath and backed away. She felt for the doorknob. She threw open the door and ran. She came to the large gate. She tried to open it but it wouldn't budge. She tried to climb but as soon as she did a stone wall appeared out of no where. 'HHHHHHELP MMMMME! AAAAANYBODY PLEASE!" She called.she looked around. She was trapped in Fox Hill college. She had to find a way out. Somehow.

Hey I'm Erin and first of, very interesting start. Though I must say, it's really hard to comment on something so short. You had a few errors like:

She called out "H-hello?" She called.

You repeated she called twice and either way the second she wouldn't have been capitalized. Now also, this entire scene or beginning just moved way to fast, and how did it go from Fox Hill College to Raven Hill College. I like this start and if you've got anything you'd like to discuss with me just send me a PM.
Keep this up,
Erin

Hey,
this is realy good i like it but like Erin said make the starting a little longer I want it to last longer and want to read more that also means writing more!!! but other wise you are doing awesome and i love your writing skills! you are doing great cant wait to see more. Your fellow writer for jesus...



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Seems like a nice little start to an good horror tale. As a review I would advise editing your punctuation and capitalization other then that looks pretty good!