Did you just type this up randomly? The last line of the haiku seemed kind of random to me. I would suggest writing a more lengthy poem rather than a haiku, for I sense a lot of feeling from this writing.
Oh, and by the way, "refridgerator" is spelled "refrigerator". (was that purposely spelled like that?)
erm...don't haiku's have 4 lines.....I really don't know what to say to this....erm....I'm going to be going now *walks slowly backrounds...then RUNS!*
Just kidding, this is weird...don't think you'll be winning many competitions with this but just the originality of it might get you first place.
I am nothing but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's or maybe like pocket candy that's just a bit too sweet.
jasminebells, I thank you for your comment, although I don't intend on releasing this silly (but genius) poem into any competitions. I wanted to let you know that haikus in fact operate on three lines only.
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I am nothing but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's or maybe like pocket candy that's just a bit too sweet.