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Edited due to plagiarism.
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Last edited by Wang Chung on Tue Feb 02, 2010 1:16 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Did you just type this up randomly? :) The last line of the haiku seemed kind of random to me. I would suggest writing a more lengthy poem rather than a haiku, for I sense a lot of feeling from this writing.

Oh, and by the way, "refridgerator" is spelled "refrigerator". (was that purposely spelled like that?)




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erm...don't haiku's have 4 lines.....I really don't know what to say to this....erm....I'm going to be going now *walks slowly backrounds...then RUNS!*

Just kidding, this is weird...don't think you'll be winning many competitions with this but just the originality of it might get you first place.
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~




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jasminebells, I thank you for your comment, although I don't intend on releasing this silly (but genius) poem into any competitions. I wanted to let you know that haikus in fact operate on three lines only.
Last edited by Wang Chung on Tue Feb 02, 2010 7:17 am, edited 2 times in total.




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I must admit it is genius! :)
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~




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Wow... spasmodic, Random...Why refrigerator?




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They don't make sense, them haikus... so... REFRIGERATOR. 8D

Seriously, I LOL'd when I saw this. I don't agree it's a work of genius, though... I've seen better randomness. Oh well. It's been fun LOLing with ya. :)
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Locked due to plagiarism. This is like the most famous haiku on the internet, y'know.
I wrote the above just for you.



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