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I've always enjoyed stories about wolves. :) They're one of my favorite animals, I tell you. One thing I noticed, though:

"I think I broke my collar bone but no worries; it would heal in less than a minute."

-For some reason, to me that sounds like a tense change (example, present tense, future tense, etc). You might want to consider revising that. Of course, it's only my opinion. It might be perfectly okay to do that. It just sounds... awkward to me.

Good luck, and keep writing!

~~Bugwhisker



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— Leslie Knope