I loved my old one, even if hewas lost at sea. .and another
My lifechanged for the worseyour conjoining the words. I like your descriptions especially
After the great invasion, I was taken from my home in the country and moved to the busy, smogfilled big city where I dwelled in a high-rise apartment. I tried to survive it. But I was not allowed to be myself.I think your space bar must be faulty :
Mother sighed andran her fingers through my wild curly mop of hair.
I stared up into my mom’s eyes. Had she forgotten that she too had a wild mop of hair when shewas my ageLove the way imogene calls her stepfather "stepfather" Its a classic story about what must happen to a lot of girls whose parents remarry. Its believable and realistic. I didn't read it all but i can say nice start and keep writing. If this is just the first chapter then its way too long if its the whole story then consider separating it into chapters. Trust me i made the same mistake when i posted 3 chapters in one of my story- people told me that they either didn't have time or couldn't be bothered reading it all. Anyway it sounds really good so far
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