power, confidense, spotlight i want it. Flashing lights all around me people wanting my picture i want it. to walk the runway, to wear the clothes, to be the model i want it.
Hi.! This is really good but why did you stop? You should more emotion into this.
power,confidense
you spelled confidence wrong Hun. Confidence is spelled with and s instead of a c. And the p in power should be capitalized. Since this is a poem so it should be written in poem form Instead of It being all squished together like a paragraph. Review poems and see how others write their poetry, then rewrite this. PM me for any questions. <3; Layla
I hope someday that someone will walk into my life and help me realize why it never worked out with him or anyone else.
This isn't so bad, but I think you should elaborate a little more, probably give us a bit more on setting and why she wants this, and possibly work on the structure of this just a little bit more. Also! The pronoun I should always be capitalized.
Keep writing.
June
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