One Man's Prison

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I sat there in a straight jacket, in a corner. All around me were
walls of soft material. No matter which way I shifted positions, my
body was engulfed in pain. Cuts all over me seeped red through the
white fabric of the jacket every time I moved. I felt a sneeze come,
and I thought to myself, "Please god no," and with an inward heave of
my chest, I sneezed, my face's muscles distorting its image, and
searing pain drowned my mind in panicked thoughts. As if the knife
was cutting into my face yet again. Both arms restrained, legs
chained together, I sat alone in that corner, and three words escaped
my lips. "Free at last."




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I think you have a very poetic way of writing, I like how you carefully picked your words as these were very detailed. :D
I hope you continue, and WELL DONE
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Someone told me there's a girl out there, with love in her eyes and flowers, in her hair.




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I agree, I really think that you would be good at writing poetry because you have a very poetic way of writing and you use some very good words. You are also very good at describing the surroundings. Well done.
Keep Writing

Lydia
Thinking about what you COULD achieve will get you no where. You've got to chase your dreams.
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I think he did write one poem on here. I like the twist at the end, I always love a bit of irony. Phillip K. Dick was amazing at that. Good luck, this piece is great



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