Wide and Quaking Blue

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Wide and Quaking Blue

Mention something

In painless prose

To remind me who she’s wandering away from

Lanking gloriously at half-assed fancy cocktail parties

With a martini in one hand

and .

an olive clutched desperately between a set of bleached teeth

cemented in place by bright red manicure clawed fingernails set upon the toothpick

bleached teeth.

Like chiclet gum

It’s clean and easy ; famous grin

Hours latter, to wobble, giggling like stupid on a holiday

Into the apartment where the rent is a gucci imitation purse

Retire to a chair, half drunk and naked, to hump a man

Who is only an epiphany when you are drunk

And your three year old daughter wanders to the door to stare at her mother’s legs flailing

Eyes wide and quaking blue

Her mother’s legs flailing

Over the tanned and hairy back of stranger skin

Her panty hose halfway of her foot, and her arms floundering

The little girl thought that her mommy was drowning
Words are spilling out like endless rain into a paper cup, they slither while they pass. They slip away across the universe... Pools of sorrow, waves of joy are drifting thorough my open mind possessing and caressing me..




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I enjoyed this poem. You gave me plenty of imagery and it had a meaningful, somewhat depressing, message. I like that the mechanics of this poem did not have any goals to meet, from what I can see (rhyming, meter, certain line length to meet, etc.) Good job.




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it was a depressing poem but very realistic. The last line

The little girl thought that her mommy was drowning


This was a strong line.
Real poetry are those with the best words in the best order

~~~~~~~~Mandy~~~~~~~~~



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