My First Manga.

So...here I guess.

Image traced from: http://www.coverbrowser.com/image/bests ... 1089-1.jpg

Hello, Fallen!

Very, very good! I like it. The only part that really bugs me are her legs. They seem a bit too skinny, especially at the knees. Otherwise though, I love it. The plushie is a awesome touch.

Great job.

Best of wishes and luck, and keep on drawing!

~Firearris

I really like it and I think it's pretty well-drawn overall, but I reckon the skirt should really go straight-out or something because it's bugging me. The arms look too skinny and the hands too short. With the neck of the shirt, you'll also notice that it's covering one side completely but not the other. And I agree, the legs look too skinny.

Other than that, it's awesome! Love it! I like how her outfit isn't completely symmetrical, it's really cool!

Hope I helped.

~Durrance

Hey, forgottenfallen!

The main thing you need to do is actually make it original-looking. Right now, it looks almost exactly like this girl:



Too much like her, in fact! The clothes, the shoes... there's a different hairstyle and your strokes are more simplistic, but that's about it.

As an artist, it is important to learn how to draw and the basic techniques, so it's good that you're trying to draw this girl. However, this girl should only be drawn as a practice, and you shouldn't actually post it on an online public forum like this one, especially when you have no credit to the original artist. Although you drew this, the credit still belongs to the original artist, so be sure to mention the artist next time. Otherwise, you're copying and stealing the image, and that's bad!

Next time, please consider posting something more original. Or if you can't, at least tell us who the original artist is.

I like this!! I love her hair style and the bow is a really nice touch.
I like her boots, they look really... um, well, its kind of incredibly awkward to rate this since the picture on the cover... i agree with Snoink- it's not good to post these kinds of things on forums because everything isn't your drawing, so instead i would have been critiquing something someone else drew.
Good luck, though! You can draw pretty good-i can't wait to see what you can draw!!

I really like this! Good job on the clothes and hair. but her eyes don't seem manga-ish. they look a little too pointy at the top, if you could round them more instead of making her look slightly scary, then this would be perfect! and yeah the legs are bugging me, she looks like she has horse hooves and legs... could you try and make them look more human?

Overall i like this drawing, it looks like the original! keep it up.

Okay, I'm gonna have to be the brutal bee-yotch here. How you sketched out the body and the clothes are nice, but there are two things that bug me: the eyes and the hair. Remember, eyebrows are not your enemy! They help frame the face and improve the characters looks tenfold! The only exception from this rule is Gaara from the anime Naruto. That's IT. If you aren't drawing Gaara, then please give your characters some eyebrows. And you might want to add a little more detail to the inside of the eye. Some pupils and different highlight shades never hurt anybody.
Now for the hair. Although it does tend to get crazy, anime-style hair still has a healthy look to it. The way you used multiple, short strokes to draw the hair makes it look dry and frizzy. Instead, try drawing hair in long, smooth stokes to make it look lush and silky. Also, add a little more detail to the bangs. Scraggly, chunky bangs make hair look...well, not that good. Once again, try to draw bangs in swift, medium-short strokes in order to make them a little more realistic.

The lines you drew were rough. I'm not going to pummel you to the ground with very critical words, so I'll just say that to get a basic drawing, you need guidelines. You know, for drawing faces and bodies. This is your first manga! I say it's better than my first... So I give you kudos for that. But, you need to be patient with your artwork. It looks like you hurried a bit. I think it would have looked much , much, much better if you were careful with details and shading. I like the wings. The hair is not naturally curved around the face. (I'm not being super critical, am I? I just want to help :/ )
I like it overall and I encourage you to keep on drawing because when you have the will to try, and have patience, the artwork of the universe seems to be at the edge of your mind ready to spill ideas on paper. It's fun to draw- at the least, learning basic techniques can really help you in the long run. Keep drawing!:D
PM me if you want!
~Skyy.