captain.classy

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This is for captain.classy since she won my contest. This is for you captain! *salutes*

“I’ll be your friend,” she said,
That captain I met.
“I’ve got your back” she told me,
"And never ever cry."

She praised my poems
And made me feel special
And loved


Her words mean more to me
Then the praise hidden within them
To know that she is my friend
Is the greatest gift of all

Our captain.classy
Last edited by Forestqueen808 on Tue Dec 29, 2009 5:07 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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For just one second I felt whole... as you flew right through me.


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Ahh forest I love you! Here I go!

Forestqueen808 wrote:
“I’ll be your friend,” she said,
That captain I met.
“I’ve got your back” she told me,
And never let me cry. I also think you should say this line in quotes too. "I'll never let you cry." I think it would sound better that way.
She praised my poems
andMade me feel specialI think there should be an and here. Or, at least a comma.
And loved

Though she should knowI don't think though fits in here.
Her words mean more to me
Then the praise hidden within them.They really do! <3
To know that she is my friend
Is the greatest gift of all

Our captain.classyMy favorite part! :D


This was so great. Did you write it after our chat conversation?! I think you did. After we confessed our love for each other and Moriah pronounced us married. Lol! I feel like it's coming from a true friend!
Your bff for life, Classy <3




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LOL! You kids are crazy! And of course, it amuses me that captain.classy gives a full review... of course! YWS has trained you well. :P

One thing:

She praised my poems
Made me feel special
And loved

I would like to see more details on this! This is very, very vague. I could write this about anybody and not really think about it. Now, to be specific... that's the challenge. ;)

Cute poem, lol.
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Of course! She may need that info for another poem! Anything I can do to help other writers.
Hey, I guess YWS has taught me well!




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Awwww Forest thats so sweet! Awesome job! :D
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The poem was really sweet. I could find no lines or words that had any mistakes. Keep it up! :)
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Aw Forest that was soooo sweet!!! I thik it's awesome and you did a great job!!! captain.classy is one lucky YWSer! :lol: (why am I laughing...?) Great job!!! Talk to you soon!!
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