Where no one will know

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Come with me to a place far away
Where the birds sing as the music plays,
Walk with me as the sparkling sea sways
Where the glistening sun sparkles as you lay.

Dance with me in a place nearby
Where the stars shine in the midnight sky,
Sing with me in the silent cool breeze
While you'll lie and dream beautiful dreams.

Glide with me as we fly completely free
Where there's many places to go and see,
Laugh with me as your heart glows
Where the cool waters gently flow.

Come with me, we have to go
Where no one can find us, where no one will know
A place where we will be on our own
Happy forever, together as one.
Last edited by Angel17 on Thu Nov 10, 2005 6:54 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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~~~~~~~~Mandy~~~~~~~~~




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Very whimsical and happy. I really love it. Wonderful work. The imagery is fabulous and I really like the last stanza, it really wrapped it up.

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*~*Shining through the dark black night...Twinkling Starz*~*




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Fantastical
I'm impressed

Run with me as we fly completely free
Where there's many places to go and see,
Laugh with me as your heart glows
Where the cool waters gently flow.


Run with me as we fly? Is this running or flying?
Also, the last line of the third stanza doesn't seem to fit (with that particular stanza).

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...would you mind to review something of mine?



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