MoonStrike (prologue)

It hurt, but I still had to move. And move fast. Scrambling through the trees as fast as I could, scratching every part of my body as I went, I heard the sound I had been dreading. A prolonged howl. I saw in the distance, nearly impossible to spot from behind the tightly packed trees, a cluster of bushes.
'I have to get away!' I thought, though the fear nearly incapacitated me. 'Just keep running' I repeated 'He might leave you alone eventually if you just keep running' I knew, however, that only a fool would believe the hopeles encouragement I repeated in my head- and no fool was I.
Trying to keep myself moving anyway, with only these meaningless words as propellant, I nearly cried out when I tripped on a large log that had been waiting to catch me, fateful forest as this was, and my leg made a sickening lurch. I clamped my mouth shut and lunged for all I was worth towards the bushes.
I stayed huddled within the shelter of the tiny shelter, shivering with cold, when I heard a noise that was far too close to be leaving. A sort of scratching, sniffling sound, that was only a few feet away. I didn't look out, but I knew what was coming before it came.
It thrust it's' large head through the bush and smiled.

Hey there DarkSpiral!
So your prologue was in a success in the fact it really did draw the reader in. Considering how short it was (which is completely okay for a prologue) there weren't too many errors, but these are the ones I caught.

A prolonged howl.

Now I know what you're trying to get across with the shortness of sentences, but here I would make this a complete one. I'd suggest, A prolonged howl pierced the night.

just keep running' I knew, however

here that apostrophe should be a period, since it's a new sentence. But I'm guessing you just overlooked it.

It thrust it's' large

That should just be its.

Well that's really all I caught. It was nicely written, and I'll check back for a chapter when I see it posted.

Sooo, Spiral strikes again.
The only thing I caught was "hopeles" should be "hopeless"
Use your spell check girl!
All in all, it did draw me in, and I can't wait for the first chapter! I love your writing, it is always so interesting.
Keep Writing!
~Shaard

Hey, I liked it. I only found one part hat I really didn't like:
"I stayed huddled within the shelter of the tiny shelter," just doesn't make sense. I know what you're trying to say, but it's slightly reduntant and can be worded much better.
Other than that, it was good. Keep writing! Good luck and well done
~Addict

Hi there! I just have to say I really enjoyed that. I drew me in and made me intereted, although I did have one problem.

I knew, however, that only a fool would believe the hopeles encouragement I repeated in my head- and no fool was I.

This confused me a little. Maybe if you said "I was no fool." that would make a little more sense. You don't have to take my advice if you don't want to I just think it would be easier to understand if you did that. But I really did enjoy and I can't wait for chapter one!

Wow, I really enjoyed that. I hope that you continue because you have a great start here. Everyone else has commented and I don't have any nit-picks.

So great job and keep up the great work.

-Cait

Hi DarkSpiral, it's me, PenNPaper, I think you're off to a good story, by the looks of it.

Nice prologue, it was a great start. Although it was short, it did capture my attention. Hope to see the next chapter, which would be the first chapter, coming out soon. All the best, xDarkSpiralx.

Ok, thanks everyone, I'll try to apply your advice as well as I can. Also, adddictiontofiction, thanks especially for the pointer on the redundant phrasing, I didn't notice that.