Oh, The Humanity.

I want
I give
I crave
I taste
I bleed
I heal
I die
I live
I doubt
I know
I cry
I sing
I need
I help
I hate
I love

For I am only human
Performing in this play
Showing just emotions
Acting, all the same.

Hey SingingSaturdays, welcome to YWS! Evi here.

Right now, this poem isn't much more than a list of what your narrator does, and, sorry, that's just not interesting enough to cut it. So, you want things and give things and crave things. The question is, what kind of things do you want, give, and crave? Why are you bleeding, and what causes you to heal again? What do you doubt? Who helps you to know? Who do you love, what do you hate? These are questions that have to be answered for this to become a real poem, because otherwise you just have the skeleton bones of one.

The last four lines show I bit more insight-- but you've got to magnify that even more. You need to explain this person's emotions in a unique, new way, one that will cause your readers to think and come away feeling different than they did before reading the poem. In the end you start talking about how all you're doing is acting, putting on a show without really living. I guess that's what the list is about, right? All the ways you go through the motions half-heartedly. Well, expand on this! Use metaphors and imagery to get your point across.

For example, instead of saying "I cry; I sing", you could say something more along the lines of:

Tears fall, dotting the concrete like falling stars
as I sing just to prove that I can be heard

You can do whatever you want, of course, but that's just a mediocre example of inserting some imagery and emotion, instead of listing words. ^_^ Ya?

Best of luck! PM me if you need anything.

~Evi

This is a nice poem. It looks like a list, which can be good and bad. When it's a list, people sometimes don't want to read it. It drives them away. It can be good though, by making the reader want to know why.
I have to agree with the last reply, be more visual. Or explain. I like the four last lines, the way they phrase up the poem. I really liked it. Keep writing! :]