Invincible

So anyway I don't think this is all that great but I JUST wrote it. Whenever I'm feeling strong emotions, I find ways to incorporate them into songs. Oh and and chords are D, A Em, G throughout almost the whole song & it sounds kinda like a Taylor Swift song
Here is a link to a recording of it(i know it's pretty bad but focus on the song lol)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FoYgl9MKdfE

I loved you since the 1st time we met
In that 5th grade classroom, oh I’ll never forget
And I’ve always been watching you from afar
Watching you grow and shine like a star
Like a star
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She may have been there long before me
But you’re not the only one that she sees
I know that she likes you and you like her too
But do you think she really would die for you
Die for you
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I love you more than she ever will
I’ll be there when the earth stands still
I’ll hold your hand through all the pain
Through it all my love will remain
If only you could see
My love will always be invincible
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You see that look when she looks in your eyes
Well it’s not the same as it is in mine
And would the pain of you being with me
Have the strength to bring her to her knees
To her knees
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I love you more than she ever will
I’ll be there when the earth stands still
I’ll hold your hand through all the pain
Through it all my love will remain
If only you could see
My love will always be invincible
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Does your beauty make her wanna cry
If only you could see life through my eyes
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I love you more and more each day
There’s so many things I wish I could say
And I’ll love you till the end of time
Even if you’re never mine
I love you more than she ever will
I’ll be there when the earth stands still
I’ll hold your hand through all the pain
Through it all my love will remain
If only you could see
My love will always be invincible
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I loved you since the 1st time we met
In that 5th grade classroom, oh I’ll never forget

Incredible rhythm.. I would love to hear this sung. The only part that I didn't like was repeating the things you said. The content is amazing, at the places it sounded like it didnt make sense, made it seem like its deeper than what the listener could understand.
Well done
Keep on writting.

Wow thanks! I will try to post this on youtube soon and add a link here, but I have to wait until I'm home alone cause i have this fear of people I know hearing me sing lol.
By the way, do you think I should change the part of the chorus to "My love will always be invincible"?

I really loved the song.even though I don't know much about songs n rhythms I can see this bit that its a great song.keep up the good work.

This was awesome, I'm trying to learn how to play the guitar so I envy you lol

But the lyrics are good, and the concept was nice; the quality is the only thing in your way.

3/5

Wow, "You see that look when she looks in your eyes

Well it’s not the same as it is in mine" That was my favorite line! For writing songs, you are very talented.
I played it with chords and sung a little and everyone is right, this song is good!
It may be a little too long, but it's ok. I love it. Keep on writing Janay!
~Skyy.

Why thank you people!
btw Pacific Sky, I noticed your signature thing is the Owl City song Tidal Wave! I love them, and that song. It's my fave part of it too.
haha sorry, I just thought that was cool ;D

Hi
I just want to start off by saying I really liked this song. I really liked that you had the guts to post a video of yourself singing it. (I'd never be able to do that! ) And I think you sounded really nice.
So...

Janay82 wrote:But you’re not the only one that she sees

It might have just been a fluke or something but this line didn't sound as rhythmically correct as everything else. Does that make sense? It didn't flow as well as other lines.

Janay82 wrote:I love you more than she ever will
I’ll be there when the earth stands still
I’ll hold your hand through all the pain
Through it all my love will remain
If only you could see
My love will always be invincible

I just love this chorus. So catchy and so cute. (It's stuck in my head right now 8D

Janay82 wrote:And I’ll love you till the end of time
Even if you’re never mine

Love love love love love

If I didn't know what it sounded like and I was just reading through it, I would think that it didn't flow super well in all parts but the way you sang it just made perfect sense. I really loved it.
Write more.

-Carly

Thanks a bunch Carly! <3