"Us"

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One word,

I say,

Dont wanna talk bout it,

but when i bite my tongue it feels the same...

Its me and you, you and me

its hard to think bout it's such a rush

writtin on a piece of paper...

"us"

{Chorus]
Us is a rollercoaster,

a dark cloud on a sunny day,

sevral tears and a smile that makes it all okay,

A childhood fairytale cut in two,

Us equals me and you


late night,

on the phone,

You talke about how your all alone

But babi there's something i gotta tell ya

Its you and me, me and you

hard to put into words its such a rush

writttin in plain ink

"Us"

{Chorus]
Us is the warm rain and the rainbow it'll make,

hard work built up then thrown away,

beautiful music on a guitar without strings

us is just you and me


YOU! and how you swear you'll never fall in love

YOU! and how you make my head come undown

It wuz you who said i was the only one

ya it wuz you who i wanted to call us


Us is the wind blowin everysingle way

so many times i've cried

But when you hold me i'm okay!

Skydiving, candle dinners, heart ache, sparks and glitter,

Some damn feeling i just cant wash away!

Us isa rollercoaster...

A reminder i'll be okay

and everytime i see your eyes i forget what to say


But your with her,
Im with him
"Us" is just something i cant win
But to tell you the truth
"Us" just means that
I love you
Last edited by hhrockstarz on Sat Nov 28, 2009 12:08 am, edited 1 time in total.
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It was good I liked it. Espacialy the rain will make rainbows keep writing. (Sorry its a bad review but I'm tired and using my brothers phone.) Anyways your lyrics are reaaly good and I really liked this.
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I liked this. It really sounded like a song to me. Like, I put a tune to it in my head. And made it like I was singing along to it. I liked the chorus and the lines used. Overall, I enjoyed it. great writing skills. It's hard, at least I think so, to write a song, rather than poetry. It might get hard to determine whether one day you're writing, whether it's poetry or a song. Maybe that's just me =P
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