Dirty Mind, Polluted Vision

DIRTY MIND, POLLUTED VISION
Melvin Banggollay


Mind is the temple of one's wisdom
an abode of one's will and volition
where outlook may have its kingdom
about life in any form and condition.

If the mind is free from any boredom
or pure,like a clear spring's expedition
down to the river until the ocean's dam,
then serenity of the waves is a passion.

If it is entangled with burning desire
of greed to fulfill every want and lyre
and ready to put anyone into burning fire,
then it's like a dome of blinding quagmire.

If you let thy mind radiates lovely smile
then anyone you'll see will surely smile,
but if you wink with polluted charm's fire
then you'll behold frown even from a mile.

let your heart beats and speaks wisdom
with a tongue that sees without poision;
This can make thy mind temple of good wisdom
that will never rust in its conviction.

Purify thy thoughts with God's kingdom
in order not to have wrong perception,
For knowing the Lord's great wisdom
secure our faith against mind pollution.

MELVIN BANGGOLLAY

Mod: No all-caps in the title please!

melvinbanggollay wrote:DIRTY MIND, POLLUTED VISION
Melvin Banggollay

Try adding THE at the begining

Mind is the temple of one's wisdom
an abode of one's will and volition
where outlook may have its kingdom
about life in any form and condition.

If the mind is free from any boredom
or pure like a clear spring's expedition
down to the river until the ocean's dam
then serenity of the waves is a passion.

If it is entangled with a burning desire
of greed to fulfill every wants

don't make it a plural.

and lyre
and ready to put anyone into burning fire
then its like a dome of blinding quagmire.

L et the mind radiates (?) sweet lovely smile
Unless the L is meant to be Y, it doesnt make sense
and with the second part.. make sure there is a subject if
you intend to Keep the letter of L.

then anyone you'll see will surely smile
but if you wink with polluted motive's smile

then surely you'll behold frown even a mile

Doesnt make sense?
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let your thoughts speaks great wisdom
and your tongue see it with clear vision
for the mind to be a temple and freedom
to invoke thoughts with noble conviction.

Purify thy thoughts with God's kingdom
in order not to have wrong perception
For knowing the Lord's great wisdom
secure our faith against mind pollution.

MELVIN BANGGOLLAY


Mod: No all-caps in the title please![/quote

Very nice but remember to read through and check
if your piece makes sense

You go girl xD I've been reading this piece for a while but seeing that he hasn't changed even though I already reviewed his past works, I just grew tired of it.

+1 to NE

Very nice but remember to read through and check
if your piece makes sense