To My Departed Lover

I know I miss you
But being with you is no more true...
Living without you is equal to hell
But this, I'm not supposed to tell...
Talking too much about you is almost a sin
Because of which I am going all thin..
Wish I can come back to your life
So that I can be your wife!!!

This is really confusing.

The writer should make up her mind if she hates or likes him.But people in love often behave kind of strange, so that might explain things.

The capitals make it very loud and are unnecessary.

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Was the last line meant to be funny or was it just plain wishing?

I read it as someone that misses their lover so much it's caused them to get sickly and ill. Maybe i'm wrong but i did enjoy this. I may read too much into things but when i write and i cant express how i feel, something like my post souless blue eyes pops out and i just let go and hope it lives. I believe you wrote this to get a certian felling out of your chest, your heart and i believe that you haven't succesfully gotten it out yet. please keep writing. don't let critiques destroy your passion. it's something like love that grows with time

i thought it was an ok poem, because it was so simple, and generally, I just like this genre but the last line kind of irritated me, like you only put it there to make it rhyme... But what do I know, you made it! otherwhise, I thought it was really good

Hm, it sounds somewhat confusing but at the same time it sounds like it makes allot of sense. Like the two people have broken up and the writer knows they shouldn't be together but she wants that person to be with him or her. Or the two didn't break up just departed in a way. Oh but i LOVE the rhyme scheme.