This thing called love

I wrote this today in AP Lit/AP Bio instead of paying attention
Note: ...= held out note and (words)= echo
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I knew it all along…
I knew it wouldn’t last
The past won’t change,
Our fate is set…
The wind will never cease to blow
The moon will never cease to fall
And in the end,
I still will say,
I knew it all along…

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Chorus:
You can’t run and fight it,
No…
It’s like a fire burning,
And it’s unstoppable
This thing called love…
(This thing called love)
This thing called love…
(This thing called love)
This thing called love…

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Jump on the wave that’s crashing in
Hold on tight to this whirlwind
Cause it’s unstoppable
Maybe impossible
You always told me to believe,
This could be it,
It’s not a dream
Even through the hard parts, I knew…

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Chorus

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History repeats itself, it’s true
The same that I had you,
And then I lost you
(This thing called love)
You know we couldn’t just stay friends,
It doesn’t work that way…
I knew it all along

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Chorus

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I knew it all along…
We belong together,
We’re one

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Chorus (x2)

Ooohhhh! Very Pretty! Especially that chorus! Well done!

I really like this song, the chorus is amazing, one of those times I wish I could hear the tune. My favorite part is:
Jump on the wave that’s crashing in

Hold on tight to this whirlwind

Cause it’s unstoppable

Maybe impossible

You always told me to believe,

This could be it,

It’s not a dream

Even through the hard parts, I knew…
You can’t run and fight it,

No…

It’s like a fire burning,

And it’s unstoppable

This thing called love…

(This thing called love)

This thing called love…

(This thing called love)

This thing called love…

Bravo, only criticism: I like the first verse although having trouble understanding it... the part about the wind and moon. Anyways, very well done.

Very good. Do you have a proper beat established to be able to go with this? If not I recommend you to, its very very good :]
Anyways, reviewing.
Hmm, it was overall very good. I like it to be honest, and there weren't much mistakes.
Are you trying to have a kind of rhyming pattern going on? I don't see much of that, but again many songs or poems do not have to have a specific pattern such as ab or aa. Etc.
The reader can infer you put quite a lot of time to this, and it came from your heart. That's good, that is what writing is supposed to do.
I think you wrote this while thinking of someone in bio?
Haha, but one nit pick here.
The first verse made sense, about the moon not falling..however it was a slight bit confusing as times. You might want to look over that and make sure its what your trying to say and if yes, clean it up a bit.
Good job & good luck!
-JD

Thanks for the reviews
JustDance: Haha, no I wasn't thinking about anyone in my bio class It's actually from the perspective of the MC of the book I'm writing and it's about her significant other

Sometime in the hopefully near future I'll post the melody to this like I've done for a couple of my other songs.

-Carly

Wow wow wow! I love this song. I find the lyrics to be quite well written and i especially love the similies in the beginning. I myself find that I can relate to this song which makes me like it more. I actually gave you a gold star before the end haha ;D
I just want to know what is this song like? Slow or fast? Acoustic or full band?
And just curious, what book are you reading?

nice i love it

Janay82 wrote:Wow wow wow! I love this song. I find the lyrics to be quite well written and i especially love the similies in the beginning. I myself find that I can relate to this song which makes me like it more. I actually gave you a gold star before the end haha ;D
I just want to know what is this song like? Slow or fast? Acoustic or full band?
And just curious, what book are you reading?

Thanks much!
It starts kind of medium but it's meant to be a fast song. Definitely full band.
I'm not really reading anything right now because I don't have a lot of time unfortunately :'(

-Carly