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This is a poem i wrote about a girl with cancer a few days ago

The drills hummed a solid tune
and the needle struck
my mood was dark and lonely
just my very luck

My thick curls fell out
and i cried in pain
I felt all alone
and felt this was a game

For months I was sick
For months I wished to die
the only way to get to sleep
was to think and cry

No one felt my silent agony
or head heard my silent plea's
no one asked if I was ok
and my parents were oversea's

Just when it all stopped
and i felt fine again
they dragged me into darkness
an all to familiar lane

The walls that became my home
were plain sickening white
even through my screams
I hoped it would be alright

Finally I saw my parents
then gone the next day
And as the years went by
I slowly faded away

My sister came to see me
and bought me lots of games
but i could not be cheered up
through my dark pain

Soon the day had come
and i lay in bed
slowly i breathed deeply
and rested back my head

my family was around me
and i felt a blow
they gave tight smiles
and i knew it was time to go

I slowly sat back
and then closed my eyes
Then i spread my wings
and took forth to the skies
"Tell me a joke" She smiled, "I love you" he laughed, leaving her there with a broken heart




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You should put this in one of the poetry forums in the Literary section of the site. Do that, and I'll look at it. :)




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Perhaps it is better to wake up after all, even to suffer, rather than to remain a dupe to illusions all one's life.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening