Never existed

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Never existed

Sorry, I had to leave
It was the only way to protect you
I put you in danger way to long
and you knew but never let me go

just forget about me, it will be better
just forget about me, time will heal you

I left because I'm tired of pretending to be something that I'm not
I've let this go on much too long and I'm sorry for that
Just hurting you inside every second that you were with me

just forget about me, it will be better
just forget about me, time will heal you

I took away the pictures that we took together
and try to erase the memories of me.
Forget that we ever met each other.
It will be as if I'd never existed.

I'm sorry that I left, you were not good for me and I wasn't good for you
I'm sorry that I left, but I will always love you.

just forget about me, it will be better
just forget about me, time will heal you.

I know it's going to hurt you inside I just need you to be safe. Please don't hurt yourself. I won't come back. sorry

by Jessica Romero


It's for new moon
Last edited by Thinkingwaytomuch14 on Tue Oct 20, 2009 10:19 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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It might not be good.......but feel free to comment




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The main confusion may be the speaker's behaviour which might or might not be good for the poem.

Possibilities for the speaker's behaviour point out to common reasons such as a terminal illness,another life she leads,etc.

The middle stanzas are those which come straight off a movie scene so if possible,you might want to see those again.

Overall,understanding this was not very hard.The theme was very simple.The sixth stanza stands out the most.The idea of using this as a letter was also unique.

Keep the creativity coming.
Too bad we don't live to experinece death




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WHOA! Was this based on Twilight New Moon? I was getting a Twilight vibe there. It was SO good! Mind if I show it to my friend? She is obsessed with New Moon. She'd love it. Of course I shall give you full credit! Could you write one on Twilight? (I am OBSESSED!) LOL. If you ever need a review I am happy to help!
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Yes, it was for new moon. You may show this to your friend I do not mind. I am sort of obsessed too. Young Gun I will see what I can do about the bewilder parts




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PLEASE! I would like you to help me with the those review.....this is my first time....and help seems nice....




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Teehee, I already read this one before on Facebook ;)
Nice job!
Making it match up with the events in the book was a nice touch, like the apology, the things he said, and the fact that Bella tore up all the things they shared together that she stored.
Write on.




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I find it lovely that people now write poetry tributes to teen fiction. The positive thing is that your poem is probably on par if not better than the whole series. :-)
I should have been a pair of ragged claws
Scuttling across the floors of silent seas. . . . . .

"The Lovesong of J Alfred Prufrock" T.S Eliot




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I don't think that it was very good. It was okay, but I strongly suggest that you do not base your poems off of books and such. Base them off of real experiences and feelings. Poems for Twilight is a little bit creepy. Edward is not real, get over yourself, create your own, real Edward. And, besides, Jocaobs better. :P
Many ask me if I see the glass as half full or half empty. Well, I don't know about you, but I see the glass as, WHO DRANK HALF OF MY MILK?!?!?!




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Haha =) Jacob is better. But I wrote this a long time ago though. Like around January By that time I was sort of obsessed with twilight sagas So I wrote a poem. I do have poems of my own it just I am unable to put them up I do not have enough reviews.



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