This is my first short story. I suck at endings so tell me how it goes.
I hadn't known her well but I still cry before I got to sleep. She had been my best memory at the hospital. When I was in pain she would help me through it. When I wanted to cry, she would be that shoulder. When I wanted to laugh she would be that joke. But now she was gone forever. I could't ever attend to her fueral. I was really bad at sad things. I would cry at a sad movie or cry at the SPCA comercail. I smiled shyly at the memory of her sitting beside me. A small fire in my dark room. Hope was now gone for her survial.
I took a deep breath and looked down at the needle sticking into my hand. I could hear the beeping of the machine from my heart as it beat faster. A tear fell down my cheek and lande in my open hands. What was I feeling? Grief? yes. Anger? yes. Why had she died? I should have died. I should have left to go to the hands of god. She disearved this world no matter how cruel it was. I remember when she use to make me laugh but then her Cancer would take over and she would start bleeing.
I shied away from teh memory and watched the door. I was all cured now. I could go home. But Maddie was dead.
Death.
Not a good silence around a hospital. She use to be in the room next to me. So verytime her Cancer would bother her I could hear her scream. I would cover my ears and cry and pray. Now all that praying had gone to waist. She was gone. Forever. When I had first come to the hospital after the accident I had been almost dead. But I had found a freind. She had told me that her pain would cancle out my pain and then I would be better.
She would try to keep me from screaming when they pulled out the glass from my skin or when they put my bones back in place.
I had found my light at the end of the tunnel but now she was dead. The doctor had said she was better. They had lied! That's what they like doing when you ahve no hope. Lie. I heard the door open and my mother walked in. "Hi hon. How are you?" she asked.
I didn't want to look up at her. I heard her close the door. "It's time to go home Sara" my mother said softly.
I lifted my head to look at her. "No" I said.
"Honey we can't do anything to help her now. She's gone" my mother tried to remind me.
I know! I wanted to shout at her but I kept myself still. Maddie had almost lived through Cancer but like before. It had eaten her away, as well as a few thousand other people. My mother stood beside me and put a hand on my face. I pulled away to sit on the end of the hospital bed. "Honey you did something to save her. You tired and you succeded. She is now in no pain at all" my mother said trying to calm me down.
She was right, I had given Maddie my left lung to save her life. And I had...for a few months. The nurse came in and started taking out the needles in my arms. I put my hands on my face and felt another tear fall donw my cheek. This nightmare would never end. The nurse finished her work and smield at me. "You're all cured" she said.
Anger bubbled though my stomach and flew out my mouth. "WHAT ABOUT MADDIE!? SHE DISERVED TO LIVE AS MUCH AS ANYONE IN THIS HOSPITAL!" I shouted.
Tears flew out of my eyes and fell donw my face. I didn't bother to whipe them away. "SHE HAD DREAMS! SHE HAD A FUTURE!" I kept shouting.
My voice cracked from my sobs. The nurse waited till I had finished. "We did everything we could Sara" The nurse said.
Suddely the nurse's eyes looked like Maddie's. I stopped and my anger flew out of me. "Where sorry about you're loss Sara" The nurse said.
I fell to my knees with a sudden clunk. "I miss her" I sobbed into the ground.
My mother put her arm around me. "I know" she said.
She didn't. But beacause I loved her I lt her try her best to comfort me.
With my eyes closed my mother arms felt like Maddie's little ones around me. She had been only eight when Cancer ate her up. I was now sixteen. And I had survived a fall from a twenty story building.
I would title your story instead of putting a caption: It makes people much more likely to read your story. 