A Moment

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I first checked out A Moment when I was nineteen. My college English teacher, convinced that college freshmen didn’t read enough and didn’t have enough to do already, gave us each a list of blank spaces and told us to fill it with titles of books we had read in the past two weeks and would read in the next two. Four weeks to fill twenty spaces and they were already half-gone by the time we got the assignment.

I hadn’t read voluntarily in years. The spaces for the past two weeks were woefully empty. I wouldn’t normally have cared, but I wanted an A and was already drifting towards a middling B. So I went to the library.

My method was pretty much to just walk down the aisle and pull out a couple of books randomly off the shelves. I could have cheated and just written down titles, but I was already only planning to skim and my conscience wouldn’t relent all the way. I checked the books out, threw them into my bag and went home.

Curled up on my bed, I stared at the stack of books I had accumulated and sighed. Then I turned on the TV and hoped the books would somehow disappear. They didn’t and, after several hours of reruns, I broke down and picked up the top book. It was a small ragged paperback with a yellow cover. Thin black letters read A Moment and there was a little picture of a clock face. I thumbed through the pages with another sigh, wondering what I had gotten myself into. Suddenly, something fluttered a little between two pages. I paused and turned back.

It was two pieces of paper, about the size of shopping receipts, folded together and covered with scrawled handwriting. I opened them curiously, scanning the words. The first sheet read:

Hello, Gentle Reader,

I actually loved this book despite the first three chapters. They certainly dragged, but give it a sporting chance. I especially enjoyed Matthew’s speech towards the end. I certainly did not see the twist coming. But I shan’t give it away. Let’s just say not to…


The second sheet continued:

…take things for granted. That’s true of most things in life, but some tend to take the saying itself for granted. In my experience, I’ve found that taking anything for granted usually comes around again in the way least possible to take for granted.

Ever yours,

The Bookworm


Down at the bottom of the sheet, in tiny script, was a post scriptum.

P.S. I would highly recommend the sequel if you are interested. Look for Time Waits. Not quite the same intensity, but a very satisfying read.

I was intrigued despite myself. I started reading.

Seven hours and a small piles of tissues later, I looked at the clock and realized it was two o’clock in the morning. I pushed the rest of the books off my bed, laid A Moment carefully on top of the heap, and fell asleep.

The next morning. I woke up late, got to class late, and didn’t even bother trying to go to work. Instead, I went straight for the library and scoured the shelves until I found a small blue paperback. Time Waits was written in black letters with a cracked hourglass underneath. I didn’t even wait to get home before I started reading. I had enough presence of mind to look up with the librarian spoke to me, but she had to repeat herself, informing me the library was closing for the night, before I fully understood. The book seemed to burn my fingers all the way home until I opened it again.

In the back of the book was a small sticky note, but I refused to read it until I had finished the book itself. The first note had been right: the sequel wasn’t quite as good as its predecessor, but I still had to pause a few times to wipe my eyes. My sleeve was damp with tears.

When I pulled out the sticky note, the handwriting looked the same as the first note I had found.

Hello, Gentle Reader,

I write this under the assumption you have read the first book (if not, I recommend you look up
A Moment). This book wrapped up so many questions for me. The middle dragged a little, but wasn’t the heroine divine? And the one character from the gas station was easily my favorite character from the two books.

I smiled then. That had been my favorite character too. The writing had become very tiny and there was a little arrow drawn in the corner, indicating the note should be turned over.

Recommend: Blue World

Yours ever,

The Bookworm


The first pile of books I had checked out were never read. I took them all back and instead looked for Blue World. Then A Trip in the Clouds. Then Carrie Williams. When I finally turned in my list, I had added extra spaces. The librarians greeted me by name as I walked in and didn’t even ask for my card to check me out. I collected every note from the Bookworm in a little notebook and followed the recommendations faithfully.

It continued for weeks, which then stretched into months. Two months in, a thought occurred to me. As I took out the Bookworm’s note and savored its insights, I grabbed an index card from my backpack and wrote a short note of my own.

Gentle Reader…

I had to stop then. It felt awkward. I threw that card away and started again.

Fellow Reader,

Read this note after the book, because there is no way I can write about it without spoiling the ending… Have you read it? Good. You may continue.

I had to pause then and consider what else I had almost filled an entire side of the index card. I hesitated, then drew a little arrow and flipped the card over to continue.

I still don’t understand why Dan made the decision he did. Maura’s love is worth more than Ellie’s? How does he decide that? I can’t say as I felt sorry for him by the end.

I hesitated again, not sure how to sign off. And I had a problem. What to recommend? That is what I had loved the most about the Bookworm’s notes. And yet, I didn’t want to steal his? Her? Recommendations. But I didn’t know what to recommend. So I left the card and the book on my desk and went to the library.

I reverted to my original method of shelf combing. I pulled three books from the shelf and checked them out, then went home and read. Two were all right, but the third, Shoe of the Clown, actually gave me a cramp from laughing. I returned to the index card and finished my note.

I recommend Shoe of the Clown for further reading. Hysterically funny. It has a lobster.

Sincerely,

Reading Fool


I stuffed it in my book and took it back to the library. I checked out the Bookworm’s recommendation and pulled down a few more from the shelves to search for my own next recommendation.

I never replaced a note in the Bookworm’s books again, but instead continued a string of my own books. I would read the Bookworm’s book and continue on to the next while I myself would find a book, leave a note, and continue on.

Then came the day when one of the Bookwrom’s recommendations didn’t have a note. I panicked, flipping through the entire book, searching through the dust jacket. It wasn’t in the book, so I climbed off the bed and searched the floor. Then my bag. Then my car. I couldn’t find it.

I was surprised at how much this upset me. I sat on my bed, staring at the cover of this last book. All Good Things, it read.

Must come to an end, my mind finished. I pulled it to my chest and wiped my eyes violently. This was stupid.

The next day, I went to the library. I stood in front of the shelves, not quite sure what to do. I swiped a hand under my nose and took a deep breath. I walked down an aisle and pulled a few books from the shelf.

I continued leaving a string of notes behind me for another month. Each one was longer and longer until finally I looked at one and realized that I was venting. I was angry. I was bitter. I felt betrayed.

I had to laugh at myself then. All this over a little note. I didn’t even know the Bookworm. It wasn’t as if leaving notes were a paid position. It wasn’t as if he? she? were under any obligation to me.

And yet I still felt the loss. All of my own recommendations felt as if they were for others, as if I were reading for someone else. It was Bookworm’s recommendations that had been for me, purely for my own amusement. I missed that feeling.

As soon as I realized that, my notes changed again. They began to get shorter and shorter until it was simply:

Fellow Reader,

Recommendation: (book title)

Reading Fool


Sometimes I even left off salutations. I began to care less and less. Twice I put notes into books and wrote their names down without even reading them.

Then the day came when I stopped. Summer break had begun and I turned twenty. I accidentally took a stack of books back without notes and I didn’t care enough to fix my mistake. I let it go. I checked out books I didn’t want to read and didn’t read them.

School started again and nothing much changed. Then, in English, A Moment was assigned. I didn’t buy it when it came up on the list. I didn’t even check it out from the library. But when my first quiz on it came back as a 68, I decided I didn’t remember as much as I thought I had. I went to the library.

It was the same slightly battered, slightly dog-eared copy that I had checked out the first time. I sighed and began to read. Then, at page 38, I stopped.

There was a single sheet of paper, just a little smaller than the book itself, tucked into the pages. It looked like it had come from hotel stationary and was covered in a familiar scrawling handwriting. I pulled it out and read it slowly, almost timidly. The first few words made me catch my breath.

To Reading Fool

I can only hope that this is a book that you have both read and enjoyed and that you would return to it eventually.

I must confess, when I found your first recommendation, I was taken aback. It is strange to be confronted with one’s own brain child. It was perhaps what I had always been hoping for, but to have it realized was unexpected. And yet pleasant. I did enjoy
Game’s Truth very much and I thank you for steering me to it.

Game’s Truth was a book I had recommended very early on. Trying to figure out exactly when made me realize I hadn’t been leaving notes for longer than I had thought. The note continued, the writing small and cramped.

I can only assume that you continued following my recommendations. Let me assure you that I have followed yours faithfully. I have found many new favorites with your help.

However, I have noticed an absence lately. Have I lost the trail? Has the supply dried up? Am I back to blind searching? If so, I am sorry. I had so enjoyed the novelty to hearing suggestions from another.

If not, however, I can only pray that you will find this. Know that I am eagerly await another suggestion. I lost the trail at
White Winds of Gabriel and will look there for further signs.

If this is not Reading Fool, my sincerest apologies. I am sorry you have persevered through so much writing that is not involving you. I ask that you leave this note so that it might fall into the correct hands. In gratitude, I offer a recommendation: If you have not already read it, search for the sequel to the volume in your hands, called
Time Waits. If you have already read this excellent book, I highly recommend the aforementioned White Winds of Gabriel.

The writing began to run into itself and the signature was crammed into the smallest possible spot at the bottom.

Ever faithfully yours,

The Bookworm


I reread the note dozens of times before I picked the book back up. I read it a dozen times more before I wrote another note of my own. I felt self-conscious and awkward while writing it, but I didn’t let myself change a word. I didn’t check out the book to put it in, but just slipped it on the shelf and hoped it would go to where it was supposed to go.

Dear Bookworm,

If you are not the person who is waiting for this note, I’d like to ask you to leave it in this book as you found it. It is very important.

If you are the person to whom this is addressed: I might as similar questions of you. I lost your trail at
All Good Things. A gentle hint that this must “come to an end”? Or have I simply lost track of you?

As for recommendations, I have realized anew what wonderful books
A Moment and Time Waits are. I recommend a reread, especially of the sequel.
Sincerely,

Reading Fool


It took two index cards and I tucked them securely between the pages of White Winds of Gabriel. Then I walked through the aisle, picking out the first books that caught my eye. I checked them out, took them home, and read.

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A/N: My favorite part of this story was coming up with the book titles. One of these days, I am going to write Shoe of the Clown and White Winds of Gabriel, just because I already have amazing titles. I generally suck at titles.
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I don't know what to say Fledge, but I gave you a gold star.

It is very rare that a short story leaves me so speechless. I have one or two suggestions, but fear that their implementation might ruin the perfection of this story.

I'm going to mention one or two of these suggestions in any case, but I truly can't predict whether they would improve the story.

What really highlighted the story as unique for me was the ease with which it seemed to progress. Now I think that this only faltered twice throughout the whole piece. The first of these was this line:
Two were all right, but the third, Shoe of the Clown, actually gave me a cramp from laughing.

and:
I accidentally took a stack of books back without notes and I didn’t care enough to fix my mistake. I let it go. I checked out books I didn’t want to read and didn’t read them.

In the first, I just think that your narrator seems slightly out of character describing the insane humor. In the second, I find that your use of the word "I" becomes visible for the first time in the piece.

I also think that you can afford to slightly elaborate on the environment especially as your persona is feeling let down.

I think what astounded me so much was the effective way that you drew me into the story and allowed me to make an instantaneous connection to the narrator.

I'm at a loss for words now and am rambling, so I hope that what little criticism I had helped somewhat. Let's just leave it at this: you surpassed even your insanely good standard in this piece.

Have a great one!
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well i don't like to read stories of any kind.. and i don't even hang out in this forum part of YWS but i am glad Yoda put the link in the chat...

i very much so enjoyed the little mystery of just following around another doing as they ask...the paper trail idea.. and just following it..

thank you for writing this, i enjoyed it,
i recommend writing more.

sincerely yours,

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Gutentag Gryphon --

Haha. I thought this was rather cute.

The first section was well-done; it confidently grabs the reader. Near the end the story felt like it was losing a bit of steam, but nothing too severe.

Here are my two main annoyances:

- The Bookworm's writing voice sounds forced. "I must confess" and all that formal nonsense. I know we don't know who s/he actually is, so we wouldn't know how s/he would write, but it sounds more like a teenager trying to be overly polite or smart than a person who writes that way naturally.

- Control your use of the word then. Talk to Jiggity if you wanna get a real earful about it, but he makes a good point: a lot of people fall back on it due to laziness. 7 times out of 10, you can just take the then out of the sentence and it sounds fine. Examples:

I had to laugh at myself then.


"I had to laugh at myself." Fine sentence. Leave it at that.

I smiled then.


Completely superfluous.

Then the day came when I stopped.


Nope, don't bother with it.

Unlike Jigs, I'm not going to tell you to stop using it altogether. It has its purpose for transitions... at times. Just be judicious about its use.


Still, clever little story with (mostly) good pacing. Well done.

Prokaryote

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P.P.S. Some of the italics in your story are screwed up. Might want to take a look at that.

P.P.P.S. This sentence has got a stray period:

The next morning. I woke up late...


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I don't have much to say besides that that was genuinely amazing and it made me feel really good inside. You are a great writer and I have to thank you for writing this. It just made me so happy. Umm... no constructive criticism, everything that needed to be said was, and even those were small things. Thanks again. You rock.




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Kinda stumped on what to say. I've never read such a short story that left me feeling like this. I can't really associate a single emotion to your piece, so I'll just say that I absolutely loved this story, and good luck writing those next 2 stories, they really were good titles.
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Gold starred!

This was total epic awesomeness (sorry - best way to describe it)
Sometimes when I'm going to review/read a story on here I do different things at the same time - go on chat or whatever - but this just kept me completely absorbed.
What little things people said above are true, I didn't really notice them while I was reading though.

Amazing!
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I must say before my TWO nitpicks (very well written piece, I must say) that I was completely stunned by this piece. As aforementioned, I couldn't take my eyes off it until I had read it through. And I agree with you about the book titles, they were very good, and I'm looking forward to reading them as well. For the nitpicks:

Know that I am eagerly await another suggestion.

Tiny typo, either "awaiting" or remove the "am".

It took two index cards and I tucked them securely between the pages of White Winds of Gabriel.

I'm pretty sure you mean "I". Otherwise, it's a bit "Silence of the Lambs":
"Or else It gets the hose again..."

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That's a good idea to be carried out in school. Readers sticking notes in books from library before returning them- helps save time and energy searching for good books. May the librian doesn't find them annoying and take them out. =P

This is a nice one, though.
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I really enjoyed this read! It flowed very well and held my full attention up to the end. I think you have mastered this short. I don't have any criticism except that you mentioned College English teacher instead of Professor. This was well written and very entertaining, thank you!
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Like all my predecessors I really don't know what to say... :shock: Towards the end, I felt tears spring into the corners of my eyes. :cry: But it was great, and I see no faults important enough to mention. Dang, that was beautiful! I especially like how the Bookworm wrote back. :D
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Wow. Seriously. This is the only story I've read that I actually don't have anything to nitpick about. Even though it's a short story, it makes a clear point throughout the narrative that I really didn't want to stop reading. It has a mature feel and there aren't any long, drawn-out descriptions that tend to put me off.

If I had to say something, it would be the alternating between italic and normal font in the notes.

The gradual realization that the main character experiences isn't written in a rushed fashion and the discovery of another note made me smile. :)

I really like it, and that's all I can say.




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Hey Gryphon! :D

I just found this, thanks to freudianlisp, and I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed this story and all the characters. Even though the Bookworm was always anonymous, it felt like we knew him and got to share in his life, which was something I really liked.

Also, I loved the quirkiness of the story. It's just a little story, yes, but it's positively delightful. Well done! :)
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