Pippa

Pippa

Does not dream in colour or in black and white. She dreams in sepia, a golden orange tone.

Pippa has a bad case of gypsy blues.

Pippa wishes she had made her dreadlocks at home instead of getting them done by a posh hairdresser.

Pippa is teaching her cockatoo to eat her crusts but it will only eat the bread.

Pippa always wakes up tangled in her dark satin blanket.

Pippa wants her mother to stop dieting and her father to stop drinking.

Pippa is a whole world away from where she is meant to be.

Let

Her

Fly.

Why do I like this? I don't know. I guess I like Pippa. I can root for Pippa. I can cheer for Pippa.

Um, I dunno, are you sure this is supposed to be in Other Fic? No offense, but it sounds a little more like poetry.

Character:
This looks like a very character-oriented piece. I like the character sketch; you can easily picture Pippa (girl trying to look bad and awesome while she looks too preened).
A little more on the thing of what she thinks. Yes, we see her hopes and wishes, but would the line, before 'Pippa always wakes up tangled in her dark satin blanket';

Pippa hums herself to sleep, tears rolling down her face.

You know? Something like that.

Sorry. But yeah, its good, but is this supposed to be in Other Fiction?

*Ending was good*

AT first when I noticed the short length. I didn't know what to think. I thought you might be one of those writers who try to write some quick garbage without good characters, voice or plot elements. You surprised me with the intensity of it. My favorite part was:
Let
Her
Fly.
Awesome use of spacing. Keep up the good work. I'm rooting for Pippa.

I honestly don't know what it is I like about this. I suppose it must be the phrases and such.

My impression of Pippa is conflicted though, at first I thought perhaps she was a small girl, then a teenager and now for some reason I think she's a doll of some sort.

It's odd too because as much as the style seems very connected it is also disconnected. It is somewhat eerie. . . is someone watching Pippa !? Oh gawd, the possible directions for this is doing my head in, perhaps I am thinking too much about it.

Needless to say, I still like Pippa very much. I'd be interested to see if you take this anywhere.