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I going to the southside; whatever that means.
Go get myself a sweetie, so I will not spill the beans.
I wearing down my jeans; they done rippin at the seams,
The price was high; it went down right; so gotta go tonight.


Go whippin an go whirlin; thats the name of the game.
Ya wanta see fame; go ahead: theres no shame.
I put ya on my list; so ya wouldn't be dissed.
None can take ya off; I go slap em with a frog.


Filth off the dirt, and whats that on yo skirt?
Thats what they get when others try on the flirt.
It isn't always easy; but could be so very pleasing
So whats up with this ride; are we still on; awright!!!!




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My first question.

What is this supposed to be? At first I'm like 'Okay, country' and then rap and then, what? I have no idea.

Please, elaborate a bit.

Make this longer and tell us where the repeats come in. Right now, this is like a thirty second song, work on that, 'kay sweety?

I shall return when you have fixed this!

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The Gekko
Until I become Hokage. I refuse to die!




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I agree 101% with The Gekko. Number one I do not get what this song is about. The rhyming is very bad, and this song is even less then 30. Please work on this. When you will be done PM me and I will critt this again.
Blood is red
But Heaven is blue
The Devil will fined out
And take you




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I agree with you, guys. Whatever the message means? Um, I really think you should see through it, and fix it. It's in serious needs of replacement.


PM when you fix it, alright?

Take care,

:D
Scipio: Do you know what happens here after dark? Things little eyes should never, ever see.
Bo: We're not scared.
Scipio: Not scared? Well, aren't you the little tiger? RAWR!



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