A Nameless Poem

Another poem for my chapters. This one was typed on my Blackberry on a 8 hour ride
back from Ohio haha. Considering, I like it. How it rhymes and flows together so nicely is why.

I didn't know what to name it so it'll be nameless for now.



Three of a kind

Two of a pair

One stands alone

No one else is there

A friend you may see

Somewhere in your dreams

But when they approach

An enemy they may be

And if you must choose

The decision you make

May effect them all

In every way.

This is a very interesting poem with a lot of meaning to it. However, for flow, I think a few words could be edited. Perhaps you could separate the lines into stanzas?

Derek wrote:A friend you may see

Somewhere in your dreams

But when they approach

An enemy they may be

Perhaps this line could do without the "an." I think it flows better, but that's just me.

Derek wrote:And if you must choose

The decision you make

May effect them all

In every single way.

I feel as though the word "single" could be omitted from the last line. The meter throughout the whole poem is relatively slow and meditative, but then, at the end, you have to read it quickly: in ev'rysingle way. Perhaps the "single" could be taken out, and the pace, or, if you will, tempo, will be consistent throughout the poem.

Please remember that you reserve the right to completely disregard my advice!

Well, when I wrote it the beginning was very easy to write.
I got to end and it got complicated. I had actually written it without
"single" there before. I switched it up a bunch of times before It came
to what it is lol. I do agree though.

Thank you .