Love like a Moth

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Love like a Moth.

I have been dreaming unbroken, for the longest time.
For as long Earth has spun, or all the points between each star.
Of his voice that resonates, rendering me servile - enchanted.
Blackness pours from his hands,
covering his mouth, like lacquer - shining, effulgent.

I am the moth to this colourless flame; wings scorched with delusion.
In me springs forth a profusion
of feelings felt in seclusion,
far removed from the world outside...




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I'm not sure what to say critique wise for this except it was brilliant. I'd love to read more of your work, if it is indeed as good as this one was. :D




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Thank you for your kind review.
Though I am certain that there must be something[i] wrong with it.

Please, anymore critique?



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